Vasque

Well Worn Woman

Chorus:

Well Worn Woman
Time has taken its toll
Sippin’ Wild Turkey
Wearing well worn clothes
Well Worn Woman
Whatcha lookin’ for?

Yellow teeth, leather skin
Well Worn Woman’s
Had one too many tans
Needs a better bra and
Could lose a few more pounds

Many, many men
And many, many bars
Well Worn Woman
Knows where they all are

Like the rest of the men
I don’t want a girlfriend of
Well Worn Woman
Just a one night stand

*chorus*

Seen her here before
She knows a few bad jokes
Well Worn Woman’s
Easier than most

I offer her a ride when
She brushed against my arm
Well Worn Woman
Meets me at my car

Way too much Jack and
2 too many beers
Well Worn Woman
Will let you grab her ears

She’s been ridden hard,
And been put away wet
Well Worn Woman
Gives and good as she gets

Not my fantasy and
Won’t be in my dreams but
Well Worn Woman’s
Real as she can be

*chorus*

Got her man tonight
Another one night stand
Well Worn Woman
I won’t be back again

*chorus*

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~Vasque~

thamior

I have to admit, I didnt feel this one, it lacked emotion and didnt provoke any thought. Sorry Vasque, keep writing though .

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Dark and Shattered Lands

Vasque

Thanks Thamoir, I needed to hear that. I took a stab at a re-write giving more context to her. See what you think.

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~Vasque~

thamior

its better now, still not my kind of thing, but it defiently is better.

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bambie1984

I couldn't really feel a rhythm but I like the humor to it. Reminds me of Tracy Bonham

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- Andre Gide

Vasque

Thanks, Barbie. I worked on the flow for ya. See if it's better.

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Vulgar`

The writing felt generic as I was reading it, but the base "Well Worn Woman" is an idea you can work with. It needs more liveliness, maybe another description of the well worn woman's personality trait. Something engaging.


"Way too much Jack and
2 too many beers
Well Worn Woman
Will let you grab her ears"

^Best part. Work with it.

Check out "Godcatchers" if you have time. Thanks.

Keep doing you

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