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Old 06-13-2006, 07:10 PM   #1
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Question Random pieces of unfinished lyrics...

These are some pieces of unfinished lyrics that I had ly ing around, so i decided to post them and see what kind of response i got...

#1

And as we grow older
Our souls getting colder
Someone comes out from the night

To show us the way
And quietly say
That everything will be alright

If you open your eyes
The ultimate prize
Will appear right infront of you

When all are the same
refuse to change
And to your own heart be true

#2 ( basically a re-working of #1)

As we grow older, we ain't got no soul
Someone is there, to guide us and show
That everything can be alright

If you think and listen, You will find the way
When everybody is exactly the same
Stay who you are and don't ever change

#3

One love, gone away
Heart felt words i never got to say

Two loves, already gone
Heart was someone elses by the time i wrote this song

Three loves, up ahead
My heart is leaping with joy for words that one day will be said

Just love, don't know if its mine
If one old love is comin home then please give me a sign

#4

Same old song, just put to a different rythm
The heaven's are about to fall and the saints go tumblin with 'em

Same old song, Just put with a different chorus
Satan's grip is slowly growin and hell's risin up before us

And a sinner i ai'nt but i ai'nt no saint
Im somewhere in between

And the pits of hell, arent where i dwell
There the worst you've ever seen

I ai'nt gettin no love from heaven above
But i'm fine just where i'm found
Under the sky, got someone to love
livin on Common Ground

#5

The tree it knows, it ever grows
reaching toward the sky

And in the night, the dragonflight
distracts the tyrants eye

A sword is drawn, the evil gone
and blood spilled to the floor

A king will rise, a realm his prize
and rule for Evermore

#6

You gotta take me now, or leave me forever
You gotta set me free, or tie the tether
cause i ain't got no time to waste

You gotta have me now, or not at all
You gotta make me yours, or let me fall
Away

Cause i ain't got no time
Cause i ain't got no time
Cause i ain't got no time to waste

Please dont steal these., that would make me angry.....

You wouldn't like me when i'm angry...
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Old 06-13-2006, 08:30 PM   #2
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you need to finish them
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Old 06-13-2006, 11:49 PM   #3
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You have 6 unfinished... I would like to critisize them all? What are they still doing unfinished?

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Old 06-14-2006, 10:34 AM   #4
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Incomplete crits

#1 started to lose it in the 3rd stanza and the 4th didn't work at all for me.
#2 didn't resonate at all for me. Preferred version #1
#3 started well then started to grind as the lines became longer. Would like to see the finished version
#4 finish it, please
#5 awkward
#6 finish it, please
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