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05-06-2006, 11:25 PM
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God is Going to Have to Sit This One Out
this song is a is based off the sound of "hardcore" band The Bled, it is one i wrote for my band Veritas which is doing very very well in the writting proccess. I am also starting a record label by the same name. I hope you enjoy and thank you for reading
God is GOing To Have To Sit This One Out
mike-the blade in the SPINE
of the ones left BEHIND
the blood wont FLOW
through the streets you KNO
tyler-I WILL NOT BE INTIMIDATED
I WONT BE INTIMIDATED
I WILL NOT BE RUN OFF THE ROAD
BY YOUR LIES AND SECRETS
mike whisper-I will fight you till the end
and finish what you choes to begin
tyler and mike(tyler scream and mike sing)STAY ON CORSE MY FRIENDS
WE MUST VENTURE
THROUGH MADENS AND LOVE
AND LOOK ABOVE
FOR THE FREEDOM
WE TOOK FOR GRANTED
I WANT WHATS MINE
I WANT WHAT MINE
mike-The devil will CALL
to the men in the HALL
who gave up VICTORY
for years of SECRECY
Tyler-WE WONT BE LOST IN THE SUFFLE
WE WONT BE LOST IN THE CHANGE
mike-of the gaurd in hopes of
leading me astray
tyler and mike(tyler scream and mike sing)STAY ON CORSE MY FRIENDS
WE MUST VENTURE
THROUGH MADENS AND LOVE
AND LOOK ABOVE
FOR THE FREEDOM
WE TOOK FOR GRANTED
I WANT WHATS MINE
I WANT WHAT MINE
I WANT WHATS
mike-comming to you NOW
is death from the ANGELS
you sinned AGAISNT
you sinned AGAISNT
COMMING TO YOU NOW
IS DEAT FROM THE ANGLES
YOU SINNED AGAINST
YOU SINNED AGAINST
COMMING TO YOU NOW (please dont waste my time with your begging for mercy)
Is DEATH FROM THE ANGELS( i wont hear any please only thank you from)
YOU SINNED AGAISNT(the people i set freee)
YOU SINNED AGAINST (the people i set free
COMMING TO YOU NOW (please dont waste my time with your begging for mercy)
Is DEATH FROM THE ANGELS( i wont hear any please only thank you from)
YOU SINNED AGAISNT(the people i set freee)
YOU SINNED AGAINST (the people i set free
tyler and mike(tyler scream and mike sing)STAY ON CORSE MY FRIENDS
WE MUST VENTURE
THROUGH MADENS AND LOVE
AND LOOK ABOVE
FOR THE FREEDOM
WE TOOK FOR GRANTED
I WANT WHATS MINE
I WANT WHAT MINE |
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05-07-2006, 01:08 AM
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Join Date: Mar 2006
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Originally Posted by Emosuperhero
this song is a is based off the sound of "hardcore" band The Bled, |
I hope it is also based off of the movie and comic book hero "The Punisher", because I see a law suit in your future if not.
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05-07-2006, 03:16 AM
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Ink Slinger
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hahaha, you think the bled are hardcore.
Roflz.
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05-07-2006, 01:54 PM
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Originally Posted by Mystery
hahaha, you think the bled are hardcore.
Roflz.
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first no i dont think The Bled are full on hardcore thats i put quotes around them you genre nazi. I think they are a secotion of hardcore, more metal that punk, but not exactly metalcore. I think true hardcore bands are bands like Casey Jones, Evergreen Terrace, Cast Aside, old school Throwdown not thier new stuff, and bands liked that. So next time inspect what you try to detract from.
does anyone have any real things to say, or is it bash the kid cus it has emo in his name (whic by the way i a joke, i hate emo kids and the whole scene in general, i want to kill it and take every piece of trendy garbarge out and the only person who can save them is Emosuperhero, its going to be a funny ass comic book) |
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05-07-2006, 04:02 PM
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Penguin-in-Chief
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I hope to God that was ironic.
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05-07-2006, 04:13 PM
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im not bashing you, but i do think the song sucks ass. you tried to force flow and it didnt work.
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05-07-2006, 05:24 PM
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Originally Posted by Emosuperhero
does anyone have any real things to say, or is it bash the kid cus it has emo in his name
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No one said anything about you being "Emo", although you definitely perpetuate the stereotype when you say things like:
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Originally Posted by Emosuperhero
first no i dont think The Bled are full on hardcore thats i put quotes around them you genre nazi. I think they are a secotion of hardcore, more metal that punk, but not exactly metalcore.
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05-08-2006, 06:04 AM
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Wordsmith
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I dont know, it was hard to work at the song withthe various mis spellings, so conceptually I wasnt exactly sure. As far as flow, I could find any, I suppose its supposed to be screamed when its all capatalized? I dont tend to like such songs so i'll not comment.
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05-08-2006, 08:42 AM
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Ink Slinger
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Originally Posted by Emosuperhero
first no i dont think The Bled are full on hardcore thats i put quotes around them you genre nazi. I think they are a secotion of hardcore, more metal that punk, but not exactly metalcore. I think true hardcore bands are bands like Casey Jones, Evergreen Terrace, Cast Aside, old school Throwdown not thier new stuff, and bands liked that. So next time inspect what you try to detract from.
does anyone have any real things to say, or is it bash the kid cus it has emo in his name (whic by the way i a joke, i hate emo kids and the whole scene in general, i want to kill it and take every piece of trendy garbarge out and the only person who can save them is Emosuperhero, its going to be a funny ass comic book)
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05-08-2006, 02:08 PM
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I'd have to agree with Thamior. The mispellings were really throwing me off so to really understand it I had to read it as fast as possible which did nothing to help the flow. Fix some of the errors and I'll try to give you a better critique.
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