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Old 04-11-2006, 05:57 AM   #1
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Song - Bitter Mystery

Hey all, sorry I havent checked out your lyrics, im going away for a little while starting thursday, so im going to miss a great deal of stuff, but I will try to check out what I can when I get back, but I dont know how busy it will be. In any case, I wrote this song yesterday at work, not one of my best, but its decent.

Where is the window,
that I looked behind before.
Where did my time go,
I'm standing in deplore.

Chorus:
Life's a bitter mystery,
changing before our eyes.
Now becomes history,
severing all known ties.

Thought that I'd be,
the one that you would want.
But now I have seen,
you take more than I have got.

*chorus*

But still my heart yearns,
and its beating steadily.
And as the wound burns,
I'll try again readily.

*chorus*

Forever is too much,
I wont think past tomorrow.
I just want your touch,
to take away my sorrow.

*chorus* x2
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Old 04-11-2006, 07:38 AM   #2
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One litle nit here:

Where is the window,
that I looked THROUGH before.


The use of deplore I don't get:

Where did my time go,
I'm standing in deplore??


chorus is nice. I would change slightly to
"life, a bitter mystery"

good luck with this.
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Old 04-11-2006, 02:47 PM   #3
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all of your suggestions make sense, as for deplore, im standing alone and feeling deplorable.
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Old 05-03-2006, 01:45 PM   #4
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Ah...got it. Yeah, the use of deplore was all I was wondering about...otherwise... I like it. Very interesting, and it gets the mood across very well. Nice flow.
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