babbie

she's smiling again
she's laughing again
she's happy again
she's beatiful

she's gotta be in love
in love she is
she's in love again
ahe's lucky to be in love

she talks of her new love
she says hes cool
she says hes caring
she says hes really loving

she's gotta be in love
in love she is
she's in love again
she's lucky to be in love

she smiles 24/7
she listens to love songs
she loves to write poems about him
she loves to tell me about him

repeat chorus

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thamior

kinda weird, it doesnt seem to wrap up in anyway, and only convey the meaning in the shallowest of ways, its not bad, I just feel that a different, more image orientated approach would have suited it better.

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Vasque

You are on to something, I think, but it needs more depth. More character development.

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~Vasque~

Oasis Writer

This one is a little weird. I think that you started something that could develop into something great, but you didn't finish it, you know. "She" was used a little to much, only because you could have evolved that into more character. Otherwise, I think you started something, and it's good, but to make it better, it needs more details into the song, you know. You got the words down to what is here, but you need to make it flow better, either wrap it up a little better. I guess..... I hope that makes sense, because I just confused myself.

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