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Old 02-05-2006, 01:03 AM   #1
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Art of Insanity - Needles To Say (Words Say Nothing)

This is my final song before I convert all my attention to fiction stories. I have to improve on that for a bit. The song is a bit clear, so I won't explain it. I'm done the Art of Insanity and I hope to get writing songs soon and hopefully record myself and post them sooner or ver later. I'll be sure to give my crit to some songs. Thamior, have fun. Oasis, I'll be sure to keep up with lyrics later. And Mystery, try not to be harsh on the boys (joking).

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Needles To Say

Itch of the scab...
Cut from your mouth...
Open from the shouts...
Trench of history
Lookin' at it plays its own memory

Needless to say,
The stitches ripped today
Wound open so wide
Thread to conceal the all the cries away
And let them hide

I speak history form a different range,
When I got the needles to say:
I was cut up in everyway!

Even after the words from out
No matter if I shout
No matter how I put this out
It won't be as bad as the needles themself!

Itch of the scab...
Cut from your mouth...
Open from the shouts...
Trench of history
Lookin' at it plays its own memory

Needless to say,
The stitches ripped today
Wound open so wide
Thread to conceal the all the cries away
And let them hide

I speak history form a different range,
When I got the needles to say:
I was cut up in everyway!
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Old 02-05-2006, 03:43 PM   #2
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its all good, I enjoyed this one alot. however:


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Needless to say,
The stitches ripped today
Wound open so wide
Thread to hide the all the cries away
And let them hide
the hide's so close to one another is a little iffy.
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Old 02-05-2006, 04:49 PM   #3
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Oh, yes. I better use a different word....

edit: conceal was the chosen word to bear the burden! Joking.
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Old 02-06-2006, 09:26 AM   #4
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Flows well and some good imagery, but I am not sure I caught the message well. The stitches ripped is a great visual.
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