thamior

this song isnt that great...kinda generic but I tried to make it original...but I figured i's post it for some feedback, see if you guys picked up on where I tried some stuff, I have some good stuff comign im just not ready to post it yet for reasons I might explain later.

I am my own prison,
my own sanitorium.
Pad-locked doors and white-washed halls.
I think i'm going numb.

long ago I lost my mind,
split it down the divide.
years of mocking and abuse,
i'm not quite on the line.

Chorus:
I don't know whats wrong,
but it feels so right.
What is it that I want,
i've gone mad overnight.

I lost myself in the rain,
something flipped in my pain.
and where have I gone now,
I only have me to blame.

*chorus*

I found Him somewhere there,
and I was in nowhere.
I was lost at one time,
but I can stay right here.

*chorus* x2

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Taz

Great song I honestly fail to see why no other people commented. Maybe they didnt relate to it like I belive I did congratulations on a sensational song.

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thamior

thank you, I honestly didnt expectmuch because I didnt like it that much, but its always nice to know someone good connect with it.
I'm working all week, so hopefully i'll post 1 or 2 songs tonight but then Iwont have any chance all week to critique or post.

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