Song - Only One Star Remains - Writers Forum

thamior · 10-03-2005, 05:51 PM

I've been through many hard times,
many voices that never talk.
Hope in me had slowly died,
i'd lost the bounce in my walk.
I suffered through the lies,
and my life had turned to night.
Enemies at every step,
catch me, i've begun to trip.

Chorus:
I've squeezed the blackened heart,
to rid myself of sin.
I know its just a start,
but what do I hold within?

Lose myself inside my mind,
in a world thats unforgiving.
When I look into your eyes,
my heart starts slowly bleeding.
Wish I could caress your hair,
because I know that you're there.
I dont want to close my eyes,
and lose this moment to time.

*chours*

See your grace like the rising sun,
a lucious rose of red.
Can't believe life has just begun,
like wine going to my head.
i'll let my shoes hit the street,
the bounce back in my feet.
Run with you hand in hand,
I hope you can understand.

*chorus*

chorus 2:
Oh let this night fade away,
the chill be gone today...
only one star remains.

I can see your sprakling eyes,
green and blue as the sea.
I've seen what hope was denied,
returning back to me.
Our hearts are slowly beating,
our souls are slowly bleeding.
because you're the one I treasure,
I want to hold you forever.

*chorus 2*

Bridge:
For your life I smile,
its all been worth the while.
I give my heart to see,
you mean so much to me.

*chorus*

*chorus 2*

*chorus*

*chorus 2*

This song is my first after a week of "fasting" from song writing. I like it alot, theres much emotion in it for me.

Morbidgod · 10-05-2005, 10:29 PM

It's really quite nice. Gave me the feeling of old hopes being resurrected.

silverwriter · 10-05-2005, 10:42 PM

I always remember your avatar.

I like the words and the imagery you use here. Gentle, very appealing. While the words aren't always the most comforting, the lyrics still wrap you up.

Lose myself inside my mind,
in a world thats unforgiving. - This is my favorite part because it not only speaks volumes, it could mean so many different things depending on who hears it.

Bravo.

thamior · 10-06-2005, 05:19 AM

Morbidgod - Thank you, thats defeinetly a feeling that I tried to achieve, and I felt it when I wrote it, but the most important thing is sharing that feeling with others.

Silverwriter - Thank you, its nice to know that the lyrics have a way of wrapping you up. But I have a question, what do you mean that the words may not always be the most comforting? Is there anyway I can improve that?