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06-10-2005, 09:27 AM
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Writer
Join Date: May 2005
Location: Orlando, FL
Posts: 33
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Fine
FINE
All the times late at night holding you tight
Right after a fight. Screams and curses
said out of spite, make me pissed off and extremely uptight.
I just wish for you to smoothly get through; all the
shit up stairs that's drowning you. I love you anyway
that'll never change. Cause baby here I am, here to stay.
(chorus)
I love you so much
That I hate you sometimes
Soon you'll see what you mean to me
And everything will be just fine.
You say you're sick of my face and you
need your space. I say okay, but for how many
days? Are you gonna act like this, your bitterness
is your weakness that could cause the split. But I
won't accept our sun to set. We've wept
and kept each other in check, I've realised that
you're my perfect match. Do you understand
all these things I've said?
(chorus)
Everything will be just fine(x2)
Let's just give this time
Why will you not believe (all my pleads and needs)
That I want to be (anything and everything)
The one for you forever true
I can't let you go. I need you
(chorus)
Everything will be just fine (x2)
Let's just give this time
These things just take time
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Freedom lies
In a state of mind
That can only rely
On its self
~S.P.I.N
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06-10-2005, 11:23 AM
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Wordsmith
Join Date: Aug 2004
Location: Australia
Gender: Female
Posts: 10,552
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Wow, this is a great song. I love the rhythm of it and the words you use. I can almost hear music to go with it - even though I'm sure you have something else in mind. Great job.
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06-10-2005, 11:34 AM
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Best Seller
Join Date: May 2005
Location: Christchurch, Southwest England (Dorset)
Posts: 566
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i've always refrained from commenting on lyrics because i find it really hard to critique without knowing much about the intended music genre and pace. But i must say that this was well written and more edgy and unique than your run-of-the-mill lyric.
well done!
kintaris
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06-10-2005, 01:39 PM
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Scribe
Join Date: Jun 2005
Location: England
Posts: 73
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Re: Fine
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Originally Posted by smoking_pot_is_norml
You say you're sick of my face and you
need your space. I say okay, but for how many
days? Are you gonna act like this, your bitterness
is your weakness that could cause the split. But I
won't accept our sun to set. We've wept
and kept each other in check, I've realised that
you're my perfect match. Do you understand
all these things I've said?
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Great song, especially this verse!
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06-10-2005, 06:51 PM
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Addict
Join Date: Feb 2005
Posts: 172
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Good job!
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06-13-2005, 09:22 AM
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Writer
Join Date: May 2005
Location: Orlando, FL
Posts: 33
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I appreciate all the kind words. Thanks you guys.
~S.P.I.N
__________________
Freedom lies
In a state of mind
That can only rely
On its self
~S.P.I.N
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