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Old 05-24-2005, 07:20 PM   #1
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song - Just one Dance

I figure i'll start giving backgrounds to my songs since alot of them have been the smae but with diffrent moods, this one is about a girl I like (as have been many others recently) and how I feel that if given one chance she may feel diffrently than she does now (which is indiffrent)

I hoped for just one chance,
to show you my own way.
I ask for just one dance,
so I could wisk you away.
Reveal to you what I see,
your everlasting beauty.
Show to you what I mean,
you are so much to me.

Chorus:
Sunny days and stary nights.
I look up at skies so bright.
couldn't ask for more in the end,
'cept that you'd be my very best friend.

I wanted you to know,
how I felt about you.
I only hope to show,
that who I am is true.
but to you i'm a grey man,
I want you to understand.
And I have got a plan,
to show you who I am.

*chorus*

I want you to notice,
to realize how I feel.
I dont know how to do this,
how to show that it is real.
How can I get to you,
how do I make it through.
I want to show I'm true,
yet I dont know what to do.

*chorus* x2

hopefully more people will crit this than my last one, but thanks to Bigm for doing so...
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Old 05-25-2005, 01:02 PM   #2
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Didn't think it stood out, there was nothing that grabbed my attention, but it was good.

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