bigm1978

Look At Me
©2005 Michael Bowers

I hear the pain in your voice
And it shows in your eyes
The man you thought you could trust
Has been telling you lies

He said you were his only
This has fooled you for years
That he's had a secret lover
And she's causing your tears

Girl take a look at me
I’ve been here, I hope you can see
Now that he's gone, and you’re totally free
Close your eyes to the past, and look at me

Look at me to lean on
I’ll help relieve your pain
Don’t let this hurt consume you
And make you go insane

It’s time to trust your heart
Live the life you desire
What I can offer to you
Is a man you’ll admire

Girl take a look at me
I’ve been here, I hope you can see
Now that he's gone, and you’re totally free
Close your eyes to the past, and look at me

Telling you before how I felt would have been wrong
Knowing my feelings then didn’t belong……so

Girl take a look at me
I’ve been here, I hope you can see
Now that he's gone, and you’re totally free
Close your eyes to the past, and look at me

save-the-panda's

I really liked this song. The only thing that could improve it, would be to change this verse slightly
I think the 1st line sounds better if you said
'Look to me to lean on' instead of 'look at me to lean on'. I just think it was a better flow and makes more sense if it was changed.

Great write!

Panda

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blabs

I liked it all! Sounds like something Jesse McCartney would sing! (L)--oh, and that doesn't mean loser, it's the MSNM symbol for "love"

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"My heart beats...while yours heats...with everlasting guilt...on the Earth's tilt...love will never be the same..this is no game..."-E. Blabs

"We may be young, but we're not powerless. We play by their rules long enough and it becomes our game.."-Ender's Game

"He was a soldier, and if anyone had asked him what he wanted to be when he grew up, he wouldn't have known what they meant"-Ender's Game

damien_frosst

The pattern's a little wobbly in places. It'd be difficult to set to music and sing in a consistent rhythm.

Though you've captured the feeling I think you were going for, the theme, to me, is just ick. Rebound lover, scooping up the hurting woman. Low, man. Low.

Still, good emotion.

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Damien

In my world, there are no heroes, only really polite villians.

bigm1978

glad you like it damien