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Angel Wings

By Ellie

One more step and I’m down…
One more chance to be spoiled..
I’m going downtown…
The spring will be coiled…

‘Cuz..one more little thing
Will result to my downfall..
It’s like I’m getting struck by a sling..
But luckily it missed. It went down the hall…

I don’t know who started this..
I don’t even remember a kiss..
But…I know..that it was my fault..
So don’t ignore me…just halt..

I don’t know who you are…
But I know who I am..
And I will travel far…
And then…

(I’d know that)

I’m just a horny devil…
Oh…

Chorus:

I’m a horny devil on angel wings…
All the sins I’ve done don’t cover my good things..
I’m a horny devil flying high on angel wings..
Once I’ve got you I’d just. Cling…

I’m on my angel wings..


(I’m flying away)…Fly…with my angel wings…

I may have devil horns..
I may have..a heart with thorns..
But I know..I’m also an angel..
So let me..I need to tell…

That…:

(Go to chorus)

Angel wings…(Oh,) Angel wings…angel….

Love and life…
Compare it to a knife..
Or dancing on a bee hive…
Or you are before lava and you dive…

One more step and I’m down…
One more chance to be spoiled..
I’m going downtown…
The spring will be coiled…

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"My heart beats...while yours heats...with everlasting guilt...on the Earth's tilt...love will never be the same..this is no game..."-E. Blabs

"We may be young, but we're not powerless. We play by their rules long enough and it becomes our game.."-Ender's Game

"He was a soldier, and if anyone had asked him what he wanted to be when he grew up, he wouldn't have known what they meant"-Ender's Game

save-the-panda's

I think it drags on a bit, if I was you I would scrap/improve all of this part

A lot of the above either sounded forced or doesn't really make sense.

It seems to have a confusing flow. The best way I can describe it, would be like you had written it in no order and just had verses jotted all over the place.

The chorus was ok and I think with a bit of work it could be a good write.

Panda.

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~~Panda~~

Maria Connie

Wow Great write , just little put it in order
but really nice agree with Panda
Love and light
Maria Connie

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Maria De La Gandara