COD_shorties

This song is for a punk rock band for bands like Billy Talent or The Used, I mean real screamers man!
This song means nothing I just though of it in like a few minutes so...
Cold Hard Cut

Just got a my new pair of wings then you came and shot me down!
Just found my first witness, then you came and claimed me guilty
the end is near, I can hear, it’s just at the end of a...
cold hard cut! x2
cold hard cut!

my head suddenly turned upside down then, you came and fixed me
I broke in two, then came you, and I felt so great
the end is near, I can hear, but luckily your so sincere
I mean I felt like dying,
eyes mean nothing when your lying
its at the edge of a cold hard cut
cold hard cut! x2
cold hard cut!
every you go you give me a cold hard cut!
cold hard cut!

sick and tired of living in your shadows, I feeling sorry for my self
I sticking up for you, but what do you do? put me down
sick and tired of being such a pet, got nothing yet
probably never will, well Im breaking in two, there's nothing you can do
but give me a...
give me a cold hard cut! x2
give me a cold hard cut!
Take the pain, take the shame!
cold hard cut x2
cold hard cuts!

save-the-panda's

To me, a song means nothing if it hasn't got a meaning.

When I read these lyrics, they are all over the place, and they clearly show that it was written in 2 minutes and you didn't put much thought into it.

Some of my lyrics have been written pretty quickly, but they always have a meaning. Without meaning, what’s the point?

I liked the 'eyes mean nothing when you’re lying' and the 'cold hard cut' part, they were the only parts that I felt had some meaning and emotion in there. Otherwise this song seemed like it was two songs welded together, if you know what you mean?

Without any meaning behind it, lyrics are only words that just happen to rhyme.

By the phrase 'cold hard cut' I was thinking along the lines of someone leaving, maybe when you thought they where going to promise you more? If that is the case, I would keep that as your 'theme' and see where else you could go with that.

This could be good if it had a little thought and feeling injected into it.

Panda.

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lisajane

I personally don't like this. I think that songs and lyrics should have some sort of meaning, and you going ahead and admitting that there is no meaning can't be good.

Even dance has meaning.

This sounds like rap or something. Re-work this with meaning and see what happens.

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mammamaia

why write anything that has no meaning?... you might as well just let a gerbil walk all over the keyboard!

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