Mystery

First of all, kudos to panda, this is why

Ive been trying to write something beutiful and meaningful for a girl, nothing would come to me since I lost my muse and inspiration, when i read "secretly hating you" from panda I got inspired to write this:

Secretly In love with you

Intro-
Let me look into your eyes,
Let me touch you just once,
I want you, I dont need you
I love you, I want to kiss you.

V1-
Night cried to sleep with half open eyes
Days wasted without energy
Trying to find some way to get by
One part says okay and another wont let me

Wasted hours just thinking of you
Wasted minutes talking to you
All this time you coulda knew
But I cant speak around beuty, I hate being shy

Bridge-
Cute's writen all over you
Beutry's stamped on your forehead
All these guys trailing back behind you
Trying to listen and reply to what you said

Your eyes make me go blind
Your voice makes me go deaf
Your ears make me lose my voice
Your lips just make me want you more

Chorus-
You/don’t/know
The demon that’s pulling its way up inside of me
You/don’t/know
The demon escaping from my inner hellfire
You/don’t/know
Its gonna get you in a downward spire
You/don’t/know
When it gets hold of you it wont let you go

V2-
Emotions drifting in a tempest
Time’s changing with the leaves
So much anger is a short fused temper
IF I could steal you Id hire a hundred thieves

Werent Wasted days spent with you
Werent Wasted weeks knowing you
Love is blind and all is fair and true
But even crimes this big are punished
(Ill turn a blind eye if I can still be with you)

*bridge*
Chorus rep

V3-
Nights out with friends down the drain
I wont have fun, keep thinking of you
Its one of those feelings, Im drowning in the rain
I need you with me, scrap that I need you

Wasted movie tickets im not watching
Wasted fast food im not eating
I so hurt for you to be in touching distance
To be right next to me for instance

Chorus rep

End-
IM NOT TELLING YOU
BUT SECRETLY
Im in love with you…..
Im in love with you….



Enjoy, and much thanks to panda for enspiring me ^^

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save-the-panda's

1st of all I’m glad that my song inspired you, your very welcome.

I liked the lyrics, but it just feels that something missing. I know that’s really shite advice to give, I’ll try to expand as much as I can on that.

To me it hasn't got that moment in the song when you think 'ah yes, he is really secretly in love with her'.

Do you understand where I’m coming from?

Maybe try and capture some of the 'beauty' of this girl that drew you to her in the 1st place?

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Mystery

Well I tried to do it wit ha chorus, edited 3 times, 2 I failed third I just put what I really felt there, I was trying to capture that taboo of wanting a girl to approach you first instead of vice versa, that feeling of two people who just cant look at each other.

I guess along the way I forgot her. :/

Thx for advice, if it still doesnt fit, tell me and Ill scrap everything (except the chorus, that gives it power, the demon in there is love, where its climbing up slowly to come to truth, and when it does it wont let go in the sense that I wont stop loving here, sort of like a growing love.)

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Forgetmigej

I like it alot, maybe cause I've for a long time been searching for a lyric that would kind of describe my own feelings, and I think this is close.
I most like this part "Nights out with friends down the drain
I wont have fun, keep thinking of you
Its one of those feelings, Im drowning in the rain
I need you with me, scrap that I need you

Wasted movie tickets im not watching
Wasted fast food im not eating
I so hurt for you to be in touching distance
To be right next to me for instance" Really good!!!

Ellie

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Maria Connie

very meilodious Lyric
and wonderful heartfelt
Love and light
Maria Connie

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