Fading Walls - Writers Forum

Corridor · 04-09-2005, 11:09 PM

Fading Walls

So I go looking out
Across the darkest sky
Across the darkest sky
I see the sparkling stars
I see them sparkle in your eyes
yeah they sparkle in your eyes

Can you hear me now?
My sweetest heart,
How you fade my walls
How they’ve fallen apart,
Yeah you hear me now
My sweetest heart
How you fade my walls
Watch how they've fallen apart

I go swimming down
Into deepest ocean
Into deepest oceans
I breathe your love inside,
Just like oxygen
Just like oxygen

Can you hear me now?
My sweetest heart,
How you fade my walls
How they’ve fallen apart,
Yeah you hear me now
My sweetest heart
How you fade my walls
Watch how they've fallen apart

My walls they're fading away
For you they're fading away
My walls they're fading away
For you they're fading away

mammamaia · 04-10-2005, 10:56 AM

c...
why don't you ever post your work in a size that people can read?...

hugs, m

Corridor · 04-10-2005, 11:42 AM

I'm sorry do you have sight issues? I think it is something do with the resolutions, I use 1280x1024 and the text is very easy to read, my eyes aren't the best either. I might also add that i've posted lots of songs up on here and you are the first to have a problem. I've just tried out some different resolutions and I have had no difficulty in reading any of the lines, perhaps your browsers text size isnt set right. Anyway heres a larger version for you.

Fading Walls

So I go looking out
Across the darkest sky
Across the darkest sky
I see the sparkling stars
I see them sparkle in your eyes
yeah they sparkle in your eyes

Can you hear me now?
My sweetest heart,
How you fade my walls
How they’ve fallen apart,
Yeah you hear me now
My sweetest heart
How you fade my walls
Watch how they've fallen apart

I go swimming down
Into deepest ocean
Into deepest oceans
I breathe your love inside,
Just like oxygen
Just like oxygen

Can you hear me now?
My sweetest heart,
How you fade my walls
How they’ve fallen apart,
Yeah you hear me now
My sweetest heart
How you fade my walls
Watch how they've fallen apart

My walls they're fading away
For you they're fading away
My walls they're fading away
For you they're fading away

Seriously if you have difficulty reading the small sized text on here you should definitley have your eyes tested.

mammamaia · 04-11-2005, 09:59 AM

c...

you seem to be missing the point... all that mystery said was that your work didn't impress him!... that's not panning it or even criticizing it in any way... it merely means he didn't like it...

do you like everything that's posted on this forum?... does ALL of it impress you?... of course not... but, by reacting so violently to his [her?] simple expression of a personal opinion, you made a nasty battle out of nothing...

the music publishing business is a cutthroat one, so if you want to be a lyricist, you'd better learn how to take criticism and rejection...

your emotional connection to a piece of work does not make it automatically be a good one, nor put it off-limits to others having an opinion about it... in fact, lyrics and poems written 'from the heart' are often the poorest examples of the craft, because they're written with feelings, not skill...

i work with hundreds of aspiring writers per month, and speak from a great store of experience gained over many decades, so am not just blowing smoke here... the piece of work posted here is not, sorry to say, a very good lyric for several reasons... i'm not going to give chapter and verse, since you're clearly not wanting a critique, but only praise...

as for the size of the type, no, i do not have 'sight issues... but you should have been able to notice the fact that yours are the only posts in that comparitively tiny pt size... doesn't that tell you something?...

hugs, maia

riadohaed · 04-12-2005, 12:10 AM

... ANYWAYS... enough of that nonsense that was all rediculess back to the song... not bad it does have quite a radiohead twang to it... but that makes it bad how? i liked it... i get the feeling.... finally feeling comfortable and safe w/ love and w/ someone its a wonderful feeling and well conveyed here... yet i think its a bit light... i think you could add more... HOW does she make you feel safe... its not enough to just say that she does how does she... ya get me? thats how you get a good song to a great song taking the extra step most people dont.