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Old 03-26-2005, 04:06 PM   #1
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Another song, Mix CD(Claire, My Love)

A song I wrote sometime in December last year. It's inspired by a line a friend wrote on a mix CD she and another friend gave to me.
Like most of my work it's fiction and it focuses on high school love, and eventually, the break up. I don't write all break up songs. Just posting some of my best song.
When I play this song it's usually added on to the opening song of the set. Seing as two of my coolest songs enf in Fmaj7 and this song begins with Fmaj7 it's easy to put it on the a run-on-track.
Anyways, here's the song.....

Mix Cd (Claire, My Love)
words and music by Tim Rhinock

Send all my love to Claire in time I thought it was a joke
I let her down almost everyday we were both alive and breathing the same air
I must declare that soon enough you'll have to wise up
And get rid of me cause the only thing I'll cause you's misery

Meet me by the park bench right beside Richard's
Where we used to play beside the fountian and make pretend averything was okay
Beyond the brightest, lick our fingers with our shoes in the sand
Beyond the oddities, and what you said still sticking to my hand

But we built the place on broken dreams and bricks that Stephie stole
And straying from a pack I made I gave to her my whole heart and soul
If I recall correctly this place holds the best times of our lives
And for all it's worth I wont forget downtown when we were five


The play was done, the night was young and everything was swirling all around
And you and I sat beside the tree beside your house and the schoolgrounds
And I swear that in the moonlight you look just like Natalie Wood
And she just blushed and kissed the air, leaving life so fucking good..

The paint will dry, the plants will die, you'll graduate and be on your way
Into a life that paints the sky with all the joy that isn't here
I wont dispise you for that fact that leaving me will leave you free
But after all, it's me who falls, and leaves the mystery in breeze

But we built the place on broken dreams and bricks that Stephie stole
And straying from a pack I made I gave to her my whole heart and soul
If I recall correctly this place holds the best times of our lives
And for all it's worth I wont forget downtown when we were five


Send all my love to Claire in time I'm sorry for it all
I had to fall sooner or later but I insist it was for the better
To leave behind the brightly sky that placed the hold on me
And when I think of you I'll just listen to one of your mixed CDs..
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Old 03-26-2005, 04:56 PM   #2
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You always write the best realistic love songs. Of course, I'm jaded, and on a rare sometimes I find them maudlin. This isn't one of those times. Almost makes me want to go out and a get a girlfriend.
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Old 03-27-2005, 06:59 PM   #3
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i like it! Well done
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