Kind-a Man - Writers Forum

sudio · 03-14-2005, 04:24 PM

Verse 1:

He’s got a one-liner
That’s sure ta find her
In a bachelor
Kind-a bar.
The smooth walkin’
Cool talkin’
Wine her
Dine her
Blind her
Kind-a man.

Chorus:

But, don’t fall for
A one-linin’
Two-timin’
“come on baby,
let’s get crazy”
kind-a man
he’s gonna woo ya
and fool ya
inta thinkin’
he’s a one-woman
two-steppin’
kind-a man

Verse 2:

She found a one-liner
That’s sure ta find her
In a bachelor
Kind-a bar.
The heart breakin’
Soul shakin’
Took her
Shook her
Boot her
Kind-a man

Chorus:

Yes, she fell for
A one-linin’
Two-timin’
“come on baby,
let’s get crazy”
kind-a man
oh, yes, he wooed her
and fooled her
inta thinkin’
he’s a one-woman
two-steppin’
kind-a man

Chorus:

So, don’t fall for
A one-linin’
Two-timin’
“come on baby,
let’s get crazy”
kind-a man
he’s gonna woo ya
and fool ya
inta thinkin’
he’s a one-woman
two-steppin’
kind-a man

save-the-panda's · 03-14-2005, 04:33 PM

I did like this, but I found it far too repetitive

sudio · 03-14-2005, 04:42 PM

thank you for the peep, stp's!! repetition is awesome in this type of "song" ... listeners lub this kind of stuff, especially in the country genre ... of course, as a poem, it would definitely be too repetitive and i would've given the same exact advice!!

thank you again!!

nae411 · 03-14-2005, 04:53 PM

Sudio please have Tobey Keith sing this. It's funny as he!!. Would love to see his video on it.

Nice write, and welcome to the forums.
Nae

sudio · 03-14-2005, 04:55 PM

why, thank you, nae!! luv toby keith, too!! thanks for the thumbs up on this piece!! i'm lookin' forward to receiving the composition on this (any day now

) ... can't wait!!

thamior · 03-14-2005, 05:41 PM

I liked it, as you said for this kind of song repition is appropriate, though not nessescarily my tastes. I would suggest expanding it another verse for what hapends to the girl.

sudio · 03-14-2005, 05:47 PM

thank you for your advice, thamior!! and definitely a good suggestion, too, however, the guy who composes my lyrics says "less is more", so, i'm gonna allow it to remain this-a way, unless he requests more ... *sigh* ... please don't take me as a hard head who's not open for advice ... quite the contrary, so don't give up hope on what the cover says is contained in this book

thamior · 03-14-2005, 05:50 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by sudio

thank you for your advice, thamior!! and definitely a good suggestion, too, however, the guy who composes my lyrics says "less is more", so, i'm gonna allow it to remain this-a way, unless he requests more ... *sigh* ... please don't take me as a hard head who's not open for advice ... quite the contrary, so don't give up hope on what the cover says is contained in this book

nope,

at least you ahve a composer lol, I have...nothing.

sudio · 03-14-2005, 05:54 PM

well, let's get ya in touch-o!! he composes for free and charges $50 for the demo and markets it!! he's been a composer for over 30 yrs and has won composer of the year awards and such ... great guy, too!! look in your im for the link from me, 'kay?

thamior · 03-14-2005, 06:55 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by sudio

well, let's get ya in touch-o!! he composes for free and charges $50 for the demo and markets it!! he's been a composer for over 30 yrs and has won composer of the year awards and such ... great guy, too!! look in your im for the link from me, 'kay?

ok, well i'll have to scrape some money together but he sounds cool, thanks.

LettersToTheBlind · 03-14-2005, 09:43 PM

i really haven't been into country since i was little, but i liked this. it definitely had a nice bounce to it. i like the way you put the lyrics into quick bursts. you've got a good style to ya.

cheers.

sudio · 03-15-2005, 12:55 PM

thank you for your kind words, ltb ... i used to be ALLERGIC to country lol