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Old 03-07-2005, 05:55 AM   #1
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I Die With You

I die with you cause I'd die for you
your life means more to me than you know
I cant help feeling that you'd be gone
without you knowing, that I love you

the words I've held from you inside all along
they've never faded, and never gone
but this pain still seems all the same and so real
making me so cold, that I cant feel

so many times I've tried
so many times I've died in my mind
this past that I cant escape
I just feel so trapped

tell me theres nothing wrong
that everything will be alright
chained by my oppression
suppressed by their words
but together as one
we made it through this world

if I say please forgive me
will everything be alright
will all this pain and sorrow
just all go away over night?

as I call your name I can feel you
come into my heart I cant forget you
I now see your face I now feel you're grace
your all thats left of me, and I know I need you

so many times I've tried
so many times I've died in my mind
this past that I cant escape
I just feel so trapped

tell me theres nothing wrong
that everything will be alright


chained by my oppression
suppressed by their words
but together as one
we made it through this world
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Old 03-08-2005, 08:17 AM   #2
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Good, I liked it. 8/10. Try putting some more emotion into it(not that there already is).

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Old 03-18-2005, 06:20 AM   #3
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I really like that, the emotion in it is real. With a good tune it could be a really great song!!!
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