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Old 01-29-2005, 01:25 PM   #1
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Corridor
Down

Down

I’m walking down
Your halls and walls today
I see a face
Through lines that break the page
And the lights are on
It’s time to change the station
The doctor says
I will not lose a patient
Can you fix my head?
The old man yells out loud
It’s too late
I’m floating in the clouds
Just fall asleep
Don’t try to make a sound
We’ll ventilate
We’ll pull your head back down

Chorus
Down, down, down
Down, down, down, down
Down, down, down
Down, down, down, down

I’m waking up
I’m drifting like the river
The table legs
They’re taking off together
The doctor says
You are going to be just fine
We made the save
We’ll see you soon, in time
But where am I?
The old man yells out loud
I can’t see sky
I cannot see the clouds
Please don’t panic
You’ll hyperventilate
Now bite your lip
You’re gonna float away

Down, down, down
Down, down, down, down
Down, down, down
Down, down, down, down
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Old 01-29-2005, 10:37 PM   #2
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OH WOW! I really enjoyed that. I could find a rythem in my head. Very nice.
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Old 02-02-2005, 01:47 AM   #3
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Wow, you're work is just brilliant. It's very polished, and you paint wonderful pictures to get the idea across. You've got a lot of talent and you've won yourself a fan here! Again, would love to hear it! I like your choice of very simple chorus lyrics balanced by more complex verses - some people can't pull it off, but you do.

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