thamior

A cold mist surrounds,
an ethereal glow abounds.
And i nthe wet and damp,
slowly losing who I am.

ChorusL
Growing numb,
growing cold.
The darkness turely is another world.

Circles of glowing light,
dimmed by mist shown in night.
And in this eriee situation,
I begin to lose all sensation.

*repeat chorus*

I fall to peices so easily,
I no longer feel like me.
I feel a little confused,
NOt knowing what to do.

*repeat chorus*

Bridge:
Frozen tragedy,
voices inside of me.
Numbing pain,
No feeling e'r again.
Feelin' like no one,
I've gotta' be someone.
I just dont know who I am,
Why dont I understand.

*repeat chorus*
fade with each repeat
*repeat chorus*
*repeat chorus*
*repeat chorus*

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evadri

This is all very strong, I like this one the best so far of all of yours I've read in the last few minutes
Great images and word usage.

I would only change the last two lines of the bridge - it gets to obvious again after being very ambiguous. I still got the point of the song without those two lines, and they seemed to stick out to me because I've heard them too often. Maybe just something simple like 'I've gotta be someone/ I've got to have a name" (or whatever you can think of that is slightly less lame )

Anyway, again, good stuff!

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thamior

Those lines are very good and when I get a chance to relook at my song (dang it too much stuff ) i'll certainly look at it, though I have to say its ot my favorite, I'd think it would be cool if you had some time if you could at a lot of my older stuff (on these forums far back) just dont revive them

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