Mystery

simple song i did in 15 minutes. Figure out what it says to you, instrumental for it is prolly a fast dnb which slows down at start and the the 4 first lines of each verse.

More than love

Verse1

Sometimes im searching,
But I don’t know what im looking for, or where to find it
Sometimes I find it
But I don’t know if its is it or if its something just like it

See now that the problem
Of trying to find, the key to your emotions
What you didn’t leave behind,
They say it’s an equation with an answer undefined
It’s either one or nothing, its rattles and battles in your mind
But the truth is that nothing can be answered with an answer written in a language you can’t understand
Running for an errand in someone’s place as if you even can
Everything boils down to one point
And at this decision its where you get caught
You have to decide with one question or naught
If your lover is one person you can love or the one with which love you were taught


Chorus-
Im looking, for you
Somewhere-far-beyond-you-eye sight
Im looking, for you
Somewhere-far-beyonde-your-fan-ta-sy
Cuz I want you now with me, more than love
I want to embrace you, more than love
It’s a simple request, wont you fulfil my quest
And come to me, I need you more than love

Verse 2
Sometimes im searching,
But I don’t know what im looking for, or where to find it
Sometimes I here but
I don’t know what im here for

Something I can’t even explain to you
It’s more complicated more than the emotion im looking for
Cuz the minute you think you got, that’s the minute you have lost it
Never knowing what its another persons mind
You can change what is left to find
And answer or a riddle something you want, the one will bring you peril, the other you’ love
That’s the way it is with this thing
Its all a game of cat and mouse in this thing
No matter what struggle the cat always wins
And no matter what you do or you can do that fact remains that
You are the mouse
And the woman is the cat


Chorus-
Im looking, for you
Somewhere-far-beyond-you-eye sight
Im looking, for you
Somewhere-beyond-your-tri-cke-ry
Cuz I want to get to love you, more than love
And I want to get to please you, more than love,
But every time I try I lose, just like love
And every time you run away, just like where in love

end
Just-like-where-in love(x
Then why do you have to test me,
Play tricks with my mind,
Questions just to see me
As another kind

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Shy_Love

Wow have I missed your lyrics!! I love it!! ^_^

penny

Mystery,
You are so agressive in your prose and it rips. Seems to come easy to you-I think I have said that before. In my too humble opinion I think you need to work on the chorus a bit- the verse is just good free thought prose and I like it.
This is a cool hook in itself( You meant 'we are in love' right?)
Maybe use this as a bridge-different melody

Somewhere beyond where you can see
I'm looking for you
(Some where) beyond your trickery

All in all good stuff. Thanks
Penny/ken

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Mystery

The beat for it is a fast dnb, the somewhere etc etc lines are broken where the bass stops and drums stutter (da-da-da-da) and the vocals are sung at the hits.
Also it slows down to accomodate it. with the beat in my head it comes out nice.
and yes i meant we were in love

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penny

Got it ! Sounds good. The rough thing when you look at lyrics is not hearing the music. It's an easy thing to read it as poetry and it does the writer a disservice.
Good work. I would love to hear it.
Penny/ken

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penny

Got it ! Sounds good. The rough thing when you look at lyrics is not hearing the music. It's an easy thing to read it as poetry and it does the writer a disservice.
Good work. I would love to hear it.
Penny/ken

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evadri

I agree with penny/ken about that hook! I just thought 'wow how good is that!' when I read that

"Cuz I want you now with me, more than love
I want to embrace you, more than love..."

and 'more than love' isn't too overused, so that's great!
I wasn't so sure about the first part of the chorus, but if it works with the music, go for it! I was getting kind of a 'The Calling' feel from it, and your descriptioin. Is it anything like that?

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Mystery

Dunno what the calling is ^^ but its dnb(drums n base) so dunno.
Thx for the comments all.

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commander221

Wow...great song. I agree with penny, I really did enjoy reading your song. When I read the verse it just roled of my tong one line to the next. I think puting some music with behind will make it sound all the better. The chorus could use some work, although i liked the hook you made, kind of catchy in away. Keep up the good work.
Joe

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