DrDuke

Raindrops keep falling on my head,
And the pain is intense,
The toxins eating away at my flesh,
Humans have arrived and hence,
This calls for sex,

We need to repopulate this world,
Creating a smarter breed,
We need consensual sex,
Take heed,

One by one the animals died,
Man’s best friend were the first to go,
Let’s do it how they styled,

These things help my success,
In getting my daily dose of
…
Sympathy sex.

Gulf Whiskey

I liked your last two songs. I thinks alot of your usage of words is unique as well as your topics. But, on this song, I think you tried perhaps too hard for that. I think because of your last two topics this song was not nearly as enjoyable. Not everyone make a great song everytime, so don't give up. Some of your words usage was pretty good and have an interesting structure. I really would not start the song of with "raindrops keep falling on my head". I think that is a big line that killed the song for me. I would read back over and see what really makes sense. This is just one man's opinion though. Other people may really like the poem.

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