Disco Stu

that's the name of my girlfriend, and i wrote this about her



I catch the stars in your eyes
Everytime you stare
I bet no one ever told you, you look so pretty
As you do when you stand there
Next to me, your dress is so lovely

I'll hold you close won't let go
Unless you tell me to do so
I'll always be there, just so you know
Even if your feelings don't show
We'll talk this out, we can't give up yet

Please don't forget what I say
Your beauty grows on me every day
Chills up my spine when I hold your hand
My arm around you, please lean on in
Rest your head her, don't be scared my dear

I'll hold you close, won't let go
Unless you tell me to do so
I'll always be here, just so you know
Though you are hard to read
We'll stay up all night and we'll work this out

Your smile melts awy all my fears
I'll dream of you for a thousand years
Now without you I'm moved to tears
Just to hear you laugh is all I ask
When I kiss you please baby, kiss me back.

I'll hold you close, won't let go
Unless you tell me to do so
I'll always be here, just so you know
You are so shy, can't you please tell me why
But we'll work this one out, I will not quit on you

I'll hold you close, won't let go
Unless you tell me to do so
I'll always be here, just so you know



what do you think? how can i make it better

Gulf Whiskey

Being a struggling lyricist and musician, this is one of those song topics that no one can escape but that everyone wants to. I have found myself writing so many of these songs. When I find out I am writing one, I throw it out. I am not saying to do the same at all, but what I am saying is that love songs sell a dime a dozen. I am not saying I can do any better. For almost this same reason, all my songs currently have no lyrics, and are all digital instead of acoustic which would like. Seperate note: if you are writing a song specifically for your girlfriend and need help with it, by all means keep working on it. There is no other way to express emotion for a loved one than with music. But, if it is emotion you are trying to express, I would work alot more on the vocabulary of the song. The whole song seems way too basic. If I was writing, I would make a metaphor for every feaure on her body. Compare everything about her to something incredible. 'Stars in the eyes' line is a no go. It is way over used and not worthy of expressing tru emotion in a song. Think of things that are truly beautiful to you and compare them to something about her. Don't give up man. Keep posting.

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