Crying - Writers Forum

Mystery · 10-30-2004, 02:58 PM

Crying

V1-
Sitting alone, crying
Remember your face , and trying
With one word to get it out
With one word to let it out
Sitting alone, crying
Remembering your eyes, and dying

Bridge-
All the plans we had together
All the dreams i had of you
What did they mean
Why did they mean

Chorus-
WHY did we both do this?
WHY didn’t I listen to this, urge
This need to surge full of myself
WHY did I let you be burned
WHY do I remember
Why Why Why, From January to December

V1-
Sitting with you, Lying
That we can mend, and flying
With one word to another from the truth
With one word to another from the truth
Sitting with you, lying
Your eyes n mine burning, and dying

Bridge reappear+ chorus repeat

End-
WHY this way Why that
Why do you let me trap you under my hat
Why this way Why that
Your face hurts my own like light with a bat

We cant fix this or can we?
But why in the end are we?

Chorus repeat.

Your gonna need more than the emotional range of a teaspoon to get this song, so if you dont, dont bother.

thamior · 11-10-2004, 04:01 PM

i'll like the song, it flowed very well and had alot of meaning. However the chorus didnt fit and almost detracted from the song, i think if you could change it to be more meaningful and flow better you'd have a really good song.

Mystery · 11-13-2004, 03:02 PM

Chorus(new)-
Im crying for you
Im lying from you
Every day it gets worse
Every time I write another verse
Im crying
Im Trying
To find one word to make or break
To find one truth for our sake
Im crying

The explanations to this song- Well, I thought i loved a girl, then I broke up with her when she told me she did, didnt want to hurt her if I didnt, so it took me some time and after i realised how much it hurt, I came back to her.