Majestic XII

Hey everyone!

First of all, sorry if i posted this thread in the wrong forum. Please move it if it is.

Allrighty then. I've never writter lyrics before in my whole life, so i really dont know what level of quality they're on, but i hope its not too crappy.

I wrote the lyrics on 2 nights... you know... on the golden hours.

Im writing the songs for and upcoming game me and some friends are making. The music will be slow, sad with few instruments so the lyrics has to be good enough to stand on thier own.

Here is goes. First up is "Standing here"

Standing where I always have stood
Looking out over the same view
Like many times before
Hoping someone will bring good

One night, with stars shining bright
The contour of hope appears
Just that night,
The feeling so many lost
holding on with all their might

My body fills with good hopes of recovery
While you’re looking at me
You keep my dead body alive
Just for that night

I love your peaceful eyes on me
You stop my desperate cries
Seeing in your wonderful eyes
Just trying to foresee
The futures desperate plea

Second up is "Little Girl":

Little girl
Walking the long path
Not knowing where to go
In this godforsaken world

Seeing trough her eyes
Nowhere is safe
Skies of confusion

Three little stars
Are giving our little girl
The urge to continue the wars
She doesn’t want

Carved in stone
Long before she was born
Not being able to interfere
With the burden she now bears

Everything depends on you
With knowing that
All the belief and prophecies must be true
With an vortex of thoughts,
Its all comes down do you

Little girl…


And finally "Here we are":

Here we’re standing
Looking out on the same view as before
But you’re not yet understanding
What you’re set out to do

It’s a wonderful night,
Stars shining bright
But this night is holding a dark message
Not knowing how you will manage

Looking into your eyes,
It’s hard to tell you the obvious
As we hear the far distance cries

You have to leave,
Travel to unknown land
Give and take away grieve
Something no one wants to relive

Tears are coming from your eyes
I cry with you.

The time is coming to an end,
Our scenic display fades away
Looking at you the last time
Before you turn around,
Knowing deep inside
This will be the last time I‘ll see you

Left is me,
With nothing but memories of you

I know the lyrics are kinda vague, but since it will be in a game, you have all the visuals right infront of you... so youll know what the lyrics are about. Too bad i cant show you that right now.

Im from Sweden so English isnt my primary language, so please tell me if i can improve the language somewhere.

Thats all!

Cheers,

Henrik

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Creative_Insanity

Standing where I have always stood
Looking out on the same view
Like many times before
Hoping someone will bring good << Hmm, what are you trying to say here? It doesn't seem to make much sense.

One night, with stars shining bright
The contour of hope appears
Just that night,
The feeling so many lost
Holding on with all their might

My body fills with a hope of recovery
While you’re looking at me
You keep my dead body alive
Just for the night

Keep your peaceful eyes on me
They stop my desperate cries
Seeing in your wonderful eyes << Again, what are you trying to say? Is the person looking into the other's eyes, or is the person USING the other's eyes? I know that's a weird question, but, well, I'm not quite sure. If the narrator is describing how it feels to look into the other's eyes, you should change it to: Gazing into your eyes, or something like that.
Trying to foresee
The future's desperate plea

I'll read the other one later.

Take care,
(Adria)

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Majestic XII

Thanks for your reply Adria.

You see, in the game you play a little girl named Malin. Malin is chosen to fight off the evil which has invaded their once peaceful group of islands. Im have a classic RPG base story, but with a interesting and unique storyline. Anyways, this character got one blue and one red eye as you can see here:

http://malin.hl2files.com/temp/final/malin1_Colored.jpg

The eyes resembles different events she will go through during her time here... to make a long story short.

Everyone on these islands know about Malins journey, so they know what to look after so to speak.

I hoped that cleared up some things!

Cheers,

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Gryphon

I attacked the first 2, and am working on the third......
P.S. This is PhantomDesign.


"Standing here"

Standing where I’ve always stood
Viewing the landscape I’ve always viewed
Like so many times before
Hoping for something good

One night, stars shine bright
A glimmer of hope appears;
The feeling so many lost
struggling to survive the fight

My heart fills with hopes for right
Your sparkling eyes look at me
Restoring life so long dead
Just for that night

Your peaceful eyes pass over me
You end my desperate cries
Looking in your brilliant eyes
Searching with desire to foresee
The fate of hope’s desperate plea



"Little Girl":

Little girl
Walking the journey
Not knowing where
In this forsaken world

Trough her eyes
A pain to endure
No place is safe
Skies of doubt

Three little stars
give the little girl
The will to continue
the struggle for peace

Carved in stone
Long before birth
No chance to avert
her burden to bear

You’re our only hope
All prophecies must become true
With an vortex of desire,
Its all comes to you

Little girl…

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Majestic XII

Sorry for the lack of replies!

Gryphon: Thats much better than my original lyrics Cant wait the see the last one.

Catch me on IRC/MSN if you wanna talk more about the lyrics.

Thank m8

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