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Old 09-18-2004, 08:14 AM   #1
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Self Voilent Misfortune

Well since I listen to a lot of metal and rock, these lyricks that i'v written probably would fit well for a metal song

its called Self Voilent Misfortune:


Her consciousness-perception hanging by a thread
Her life she could conclude- she was living it instead

Her eyes somnolent- too much a bother to remain open
Shattered dreams- stripped innocence- impetus oh so frozen

She glances at her stinging past
But it all just happened all too fast

Perception yet again lets her down
Perception- discernment- a worthless crown

Petulance persists in alcoholic veins
Radiant flashes keep her sane

In the skies she knew- there was God she’d learned
God- He had watched as her life had burned

One more shot and the life that hover..
One more shot and the act would be over

Death- a penalty, Death- a desire
Death –Dark, yet brighter than Fire

Tragedy- catastrophe ignorance does bring
The angels’ grief, the demons sing

Her life ends- the end was dire
^^^^^The demons
danced^^^^
^^^^^^^^with the flames
of her pyre.
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Old 09-18-2004, 09:25 AM   #2
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dont know what the read means (grinding?) but I liked it, consistent theme and a nice rhyme scheme, it also set a mood which I like alot. .
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