thamior

The clock ticks by so slow.
Years seem to pass by.
I want to go.
Bridge: (right after chorus)
Solemnly I watch the clock.
I watch the time tick by.
I wonder.
I wonder why?
Must I suffer this Hell?.

Chrous:
Someday soon a bell will ring.
And all of heaven in celebration sing.
As I run away from my horror
Push open th gate, open the door.

The hands on the clock wont move.
But I know as soon as the bell rings
My life'll improve.
*repeat Bridge* (right after)

*repeat chorus*

Going throught the motions till I get out of here.
But even thats not nearly enough.
I yearn ffor fresh air.
*Repeat Bridge*(right after)

*repeat chorus*

I wonder why.
As the time passes by.
Why must I suffer this hell.
Waiting for the ring of a bell.

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petrel}

HI thamior,
I find it really hard to judge songs without hearing the music with the words. Your lyrics are good, but a little simple for my taste which isn't everyone's taste so don't let that get you down. I like the part, but to me the rhymes seem a tad forced. Don't get me wrong, though, I like rhymes, but good rhymes, not just semi-good.
However, you get your point across and that's what matters-- good job on that.

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A man's subconscious self is not the ideal companion. It lurks for the greater part of his life in some dark den of its own, hidden away, and emerges only to taunt and deride and increase the misery of a miserable hour.

P. G. Wodehouse, Uneasy Money

thamior

th
anks, yea ive had to force some stuff lately, but I have a lot of inspiration an dgood vocabulary choices to draw from so I hope soon you will be able to see some better stuff by me .

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