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Destiny · 08-30-2004, 06:38 AM

I was reading my friend's LiveJournal the other day, and she'd written an entry ranting about the increasing glamorization of suicide and self-harm in art. Because really, there's nothing glamorous about it. And it got me thinking about some other friends of mine who do that cutting thing... =\ Which I do not agree with. There are so many people who almost seem to cling to depression as a kind of veil so that they don't have to fight to help themselves. It's one of my pet peeves. There is always, always somebody worse off than you. So yeah. This is sort of what came out of all this.

It's purely piano/vocals so far. Thinking of making a more rocky version at some point in future though. The form isn't exactly conventional.

. :: INSIDE :: .
© Helen E. Trevillion - 2004

[Piano intro]

Do you cry for the rain
To wash away your tears
And leave you frozen again?

And do you turn to the night
To hide away your dark
When you don't want to fight?

Don't draw the night across your eyes
'Cause there's so much here to love that you won't see
At all.

Are you so deaf to the pleas
Of loved ones trying to help? -
Too deep inside yourself to see.

Are you so blind to the hands
That want to lead you home? -
No you won't let them understand.

Don't use your tears to pull away,
Or carve a label bleeding raw upon your skin,
Or feed the silent bitterness you feel
When the world doesn't end as you sleep.

[And this is the "climax" I guess. The melody is based around the same patterns as the piano intro:]

It's so much easier not to carry on
To turn your back on all the good that you forgot
Too deep inside yourself to see beyond the night
Just 'cause you feel it now, it doesn't make it right...

It's so much easier not to carry on
To turn your back on all the good that you forgot
Too deep inside yourself to see beyond the night
Oh where's the glory if you sleep beyond the light?
Just make a promise that you won't forget to fight.

unfocusedmind · 08-30-2004, 09:05 PM

I have to tell you, I love these lyrics. I tend to write books about people in very depressive situations, and this song really tore at me. I especially liked these lines:

Don't use your tears to pull away,
Or carve a label bleeding raw upon your skin,
Or feed the silent bitterness you feel
When the world doesn't end as you sleep

Really, just beautiful imagery.

Mystery · 08-31-2004, 08:08 AM

This was like listening to 4 lp songs mixed uo,
Runaway
Its easier to run
Breaking the habit
And from the inside

Destiny · 08-31-2004, 10:35 AM

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Originally Posted by unfocusedmind

I have to tell you, I love these lyrics. I tend to write books about people in very depressive situations, and this song really tore at me. I especially liked these lines:

Don't use your tears to pull away,
Or carve a label bleeding raw upon your skin,
Or feed the silent bitterness you feel
When the world doesn't end as you sleep

Really, just beautiful imagery.

Thank you very much, unfocusedmind

Quote:

Originally Posted by Mystery

This was like listening to 4 lp songs mixed uo,
Runaway
Its easier to run
Breaking the habit
And from the inside

Um, ok if you say so

...So, what are you trying to say? I'm confused.

Mystery · 08-31-2004, 01:18 PM

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Originally Posted by Destiny

Quote:

Originally Posted by unfocusedmind

I have to tell you, I love these lyrics. I tend to write books about people in very depressive situations, and this song really tore at me. I especially liked these lines:

Don't use your tears to pull away,
Or carve a label bleeding raw upon your skin,
Or feed the silent bitterness you feel
When the world doesn't end as you sleep

Really, just beautiful imagery.

Thank you very much, unfocusedmind

Quote:

Originally Posted by Mystery

This was like listening to 4 lp songs mixed uo,
Runaway
Its easier to run
Breaking the habit
And from the inside

Um, ok if you say so

...So, what are you trying to say? I'm confused.

Take a step into the great unknown, then tell me ¬¬

Destiny · 08-31-2004, 03:16 PM

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Originally Posted by Mystery

Take a step into the great unknown, then tell me ¬¬

*blink* Excuse me?

Mystery · 09-01-2004, 12:03 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Destiny

Quote:

Originally Posted by Mystery

Take a step into the great unknown, then tell me ¬¬

*blink* Excuse me?

You are a disgrace to common sense and logic. But ill explain

Quote:

This sounds like something take from all 4 linkin park songs
Runaway
Its easier to run
Breaking the habit
From the inside
That have been modified slightly to produce a new song with a overrepetetive meaning snese word structure bla bla

For the record, the dead horse called, it said stop beating me ¬¬

Destiny · 09-01-2004, 05:52 AM

Ah so now you're directly attempting to insult me for no real reason, although you don't even know me

This is funny. I've certainly never done or said anything to you that warranted that. Well that's nice (and then you wonder why nobody responds to your songs except that one chick. Ooh I wonder....)

Anyway, for the record, I don't really care what you think. But I will say that your opinion is evidently rooted in oblivion - because the fact is, I haven't even heard of those four Linkin Park songs. I'm not at all a Linkin Park fan. There is much better music out there. And even if I did know them, why on earth would I want to rearrange them to say something just because somebody else said it? Think about it. Are you trying to call my message invalid? Why? Just... you know... think a little... *le sigh* You don't have to like anything. Nobody says you do. But if you have something to say about it, at least try to say something remotely intelligent.

Now stop hating everybody just for existing and maybe, maybe you'll get some respect. Until then...

Anonymous · 09-15-2004, 06:33 AM

I love this song! You've managed to soften a touchy subject. Yet still strike the meaning into the readers heart!

Mystery · 09-15-2004, 08:56 AM

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Originally Posted by Piercing_Kiss

I love this song! You've managed to soften a touchy subject. Yet still strike the meaning into the readers heart!

So how do you explain me response.

Anonymous · 09-15-2004, 09:01 AM

Am not going to explain my opinion. Only you can explain your response, being as it is, that I am not you.

Mystery · 09-16-2004, 08:09 AM

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Originally Posted by Piercing_Kiss

Am not going to explain my opinion. Only you can explain your response, being as it is, that I am not you.

Thus your previous post is forfit.

Mitch · 09-16-2004, 09:45 AM

Very vivid, helps to paint the picture in my head. Good stuff!

tekp · 09-17-2004, 04:46 AM

I loved this song, and think it would work well going from pianos => drums => rock.

my sister self harms and so i can kind of see where you're coming from.

good work

thamior · 09-17-2004, 09:41 AM

Being one whos done self harm but now has a different veiw I do have to disagree with your first post Destiny.
While self harm is a horrible thing, whe nyou do it you dont think about who worse of then you, you dont close your eyes off the world either. Instead you enhance every negative and make it much worse, so that if someone is worse off you point to it and say "see how much the world sucks" being in such a state is hard to get out of and only friends can help you, not inults or saying the idea is stupid. someone in that state needs someone to reach out a hand and show them whats better in life. because no matter how much worse other people might have it some people live through unexplicable hell.