thamior

I hide in the shadows 'till night.
I'm out there lookin' for a fight.
I'm in the very darkest of night.
And i'll strike befoe the first light.

Chorus:
What do you do when the darkness falls.
What do you do when you lose it all.
When everything you have is gone.
What do you do when you feel wronged.

In the shadows I hide so tight.
None are so strong to overcome my might.
I blacken the sun aiming for your sight.
Always ready at moments notice to jump into flight.

[Repeat Chorus]

Oh all the darkness I am that sin.
Alone, its your very dreams im in.
I'm the essence of your haunting nightmares.
I am the darkst of your fears.

[repeat chorus]

[guitar solo]

I can wash away memories so you'll remember nothing.
I breed hate start wars i'm the prince of loathing.
Greed and envy are tied to my name.
But give me your soul and i'll give you fame.

[repeat chorus]

I'm the harbringer of wealth and fortune.
If you give your soul all this you'll have soon.
You cannot deny my most awsome power.
Fear me, not God, get down slave and cower.

[repeat chorus]

[guitar solo]

I'll bring you misfortune 'till te day you die.
I'll give to you all i've promised I don't lie.
You'll just lose it as soon as it was gained.
As i suckyou down to hell, upon the earth your blood will be stained.

[repeat chorus]

I'm the prince of darkness.
The great lucifer all unholiness.
The corrupter of souls.
The destroyr of peoples.

[guitar solo]

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Shy_Love

Very nice job....you might want to go back and fix the mis spells and stuff, but other then those its well done...

penny

Good work.
Strong verses and clear chorus. Although I don't get a strong hook any where. Is there a musical hook that stands out?
This is a little stronger chorus, I think. One of my exercises is to write all the verses, chorus , and bridge on seperate pieces of paper and see if any line pops out at me. New songs get written by me doing that all the time.
Humor in a dread song works too"Please to meet you won't you guess my name." or gospel music with 'we all gonna die' verses like CCR.
You love words and that shows just work them around a bit and keep writing. This is gonna be a good one. and I believe you are a writing guru

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thamior

thanks. hmm i dont know didnt like this one that much, lol but eh, I'll try to make it smoother and check out your chorus idea.

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