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Rewrite - Your Tears are Tearing up my Dreams
Not much different, but I've taken to heart Mystery's criticisms - cliches etc!
I'm afraid I couldn't do much with the cliches - lost love is a cliche in itself!
I'd welcome any comments that would improve this without losing the overall feeling! - I would be very reluctant to lose the angel - it's personal!!
Verse 1
I could have been your angel
But I guess I fell from grace
I gave away all hope of heaven
When I stole the sunlight from your face
Verse 2
I promised you forever
That the future was our time
But I turned our always into never
When I couldn’t give our song a rhyme
Chorus
Your tears are tearing up my dreams
And streaming through my sleep
Wishes whisper me awake
I need to free you
But I don’t know how
Believe me
I’m the one who’s crying now
Bridge
It was the worst mistake I ever chose to make
To tell you no
Too late to say I love you
It scarred my heart to take
Your life apart
Please listen to me now
I’m telling you
You’ll never know
How much I wish I’d never let you go
Verse 3
I know how much I hurt you
With my well-intentioned lies
And I know regret won’t bring forgiving
Cause I’ve seen the love-light leave your eyes
Chorus
Your tears are tearing up my dreams
And streaming through my sleep
Wishes whisper me awake
I need to free you
But I don’t know how
Believe me
I’m the one who’s crying now
My soul still sings
A song of hope
For me and you
Against the odds
It’s aching for
A melody to make
The dream come true
Copyright © July 2004 by D Rulliere
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