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Old 07-25-2004, 05:43 PM   #1
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Old tune rewrites. thoughts?

I wrote this one some time ago. I have always liked it but thought the words were contrived. So I sat down and looked at it again... to see if it still had relevance. I'm posting this because this is not something I do. Once the song is out and it doesn't work, I dont usually look at it again. I Only rewrite when a band is working or in a session.

Night Tales ©1980/2004 by author all rights reserved

Listen to the night tales and rides to Canterbury
Singapore pearls and mountain gold
I hear your fantasies and I'll write of your glory
As long as your gaze holds bold

Look in my eyes -hearing the night songs
Feeling your smile -talk out the end of day
Lady, won't you give me a sigh, lets stay here awhile
My Lady you are so comfortable.

It's hard to see through misty dreams -call on any night
I'll ride in on your only unicorn
Alit near your golden throne - drinking mead to your sight
Pardon, My Lady, my sad robe has been torn
It's just my reacting but I just have to smile
Your glow makes my visage change

Look in my eyes - we're making those night songs
Hearing your heart - made love till the break of day
Lady, please grant me a smile, lets lay here a while
My Lady, you're so comfortable.

My Minstrels are back My Lady -please take my hand
We'll sing you tales of far away
Seaside dancing and toes sifting though the sand
It's only my reacting but I have to smile
Your glow has my visage change.
Your glow makes my visage change.
Your glow makes my visage change.
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Old 07-26-2004, 02:46 AM   #2
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Nice I liked this write.

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