thamior

Heres another song by me, this one took the longest out of all my songs to write.

Can't you see... [pause for a half a beat holding out note]
All this wretched agony.

Can't you hear... [pause for a half a beat holding out note]
The voices of those who know to fear.

And Can't you feel the pain?
As it sits upon my clothes as evident as a bloodstain.


[musical interlude]

Why does love have to be so cruel.
Taunting back and forth, confusing my mind.
It tortues the very roots of my soul.
To probe its depths yet nothing to find.

[Musical interlude]

You huant my very thought.
You haunt my very being.
It's answers that i've sought.
Answers to mu endless thinking.

[Guitar solo]

Chorus:
Just give me a moments rest,
Just a minute so i'll not cry.
Keep my mind from returning lest,
My thoughts betray me, leave me to die.

Forgive my thrist mind.
It's only answers that it seeks.
But only nothingness it will find.
Wasting endless weeks.

[Musical interlude]

My thoughts are temptous.
My mind like a storm.
But ill not stop thinking cause,
once they're gone they'll just reform.

[Musical interlude]

Don't you see everything in me is gone.
There's nothing left in me to see.
I stand alone in the darkness, distant and forlorn.
What is left for me to be.

[Guitar solor]
[Repeat Chorus]

Quell the storm...
[Musical interlude]
[Repeat chorus]

Quell the [pause for effect] Storm......

most songs i can sing (even if i do sound bad) but this one I can't get a particular feeling for, lt me know if you can.

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Vixen

I can imagine this. Cool. Only, I've got the song "New horizons" stuck in my head, thanks to an old Dharma and Greg episode, so, I'm having trouble imagining the rythm, or the music, is there any way you can describe how it sounds?

Right now I'm thinking a cross between pre-sell Matchbox 20, and Damion, but if that's insulting to you, I apologize in advance...

Martin

you mean you don't have the music worked out yet???

I think it of something like "counting crows" style. I'd love to make my version of it when I find the time. I like the lyrics very much.

Mystery

Screw what i said im an idiot

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Let's drown all our sorrows and we'll be gone till tomorrow...

Dies Irae, Dies Ilia, Solvet Saeclum In Favilla...

Yes, must still shut up.

thamior

heh, well I can write about other things. In reality its just the fact that ive never been accepted by a girl, but im young theres more life. as for not having the music planned out. im trying to get the music for it, but im not very good with guitar and im still having trouble finding a way to sing it. As for styles you see I really dont care as long as you dont start listing off any rappers or pop stars.

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Mystery

I'm not good with music, if you wanna sing it just sing it as it comes out.

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Let's drown all our sorrows and we'll be gone till tomorrow...

Dies Irae, Dies Ilia, Solvet Saeclum In Favilla...

Yes, must still shut up.

StuBiz

thamior - I really liked this (enough to register and post) and have been playing around with some chords and singing, I've been using a simple strum on an open six string acoustic guitar the chords Am to C to G with a D turn around fit well for me, but it really depends on what you want this song to sound like, I find minor chords can give a sad kind of feel to a song and major chords more of a happy vibe, what kind of feel were you going for??

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You never will become
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Martin

I played it by Am Am F G. Making it a bit sad, and in the chorus I swap Am with a C living it up a bit.

StuBiz>> When you say D, don't you mean Dm?

StuBiz

Actually no, I was using D, but Dmin has a very nice tone to it, keeping with the sad feel, haven't had a chance to try singing along with it using the Dmin but I am keen to give it a go, thanks Martin

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You never will become
if you only say what
you would've done

penny

Here is an idea for you new guitar people.
A story first: There was this poetess named J. Mitchel that was trying like the devil to be heard (like us all) Just hanging out with folks at the Purple Onion in San Fransico S.Stills heard some of her poems and taught her a tuning on the guitar that allowed her to use the guitar effectively so she could sing in clubs -And allowed for a career and love affair to blossom. (Sad lyrics to happy ones and here is the magic!) \/ Tune your low E down to D...tune your high E down to D you will have three octaves of D and modulating strings in between. Open strum, of course is a D. Bar all the way across goes up the register. D-E-F-G etc. (Also A Slide guitar tuning if you are daring.) Let the singing and awesome melodies to these fine lyrics begin. So that the world can hear them. Have fun!

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thamior

sorry i havent posted, I've been away from the comp and im gonna get a new one soon hopefully. anyway i'll try all your ideas on my guitar later.

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Selorian

Very good piece of work. I can hear it playing in my head. I like the overall feel of it. Keep up the good work.

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