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Old 07-05-2004, 06:17 PM   #1
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A couple songs-comments welcome

Stuck in reverse
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Its hard at least for me to move on
When what I want is already gone

And everytime the wind blows right
I can hear you
I can feel you

I never got to talk to you that much
And now your gone, I guess im outta luck
I never got to see you that much
Now your gone, I never got enough

Always with somebody else
No time for me
Well I guess that cant be helped
I guess I don’t fit in

Everytime you look my way
My knees shake and I turn away
How do you do it to me?

I cant wait until this time of year
Your sweet voice is what I wanna hear
And even though I don’t see you much
That wont stop me from thinking of you a bunch

Do you remember the time under the stars
I went and got some of my grandpa’s jars
We stayed out late catching fire flys
I sat there and glanced into you eyes

We havnt talked much since that night
Mostly just hi…
Goodbye..goodnight

You left me high and dry
With a stomach full of knots
And a tear in my eye
Bringing back all the things ive fought to suppress
Listening to my stereo
With a mind full of regrets

I could have lived without this feeling

Its hard to get back on this road to recovery
When everything I see reminds me of you
It was two nights ago last week
When it first crossed my mind
Something I always wanted to think about
But never had the time

I wish we could connect again
So many things I’d like to begin
But im scared I dunno where to start
Well..maybe I should start, from the heart..


A battle with memory
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it's been awhile since I’ve seen your face
and to tell you the truth it's got me down
it's been awhile since I’ve heard you laugh
and to tell you the truth, I’ve forgot the sound

i tried to keep you close
a Kodak moment
Everything was
so, picture perfect

everything fades away
at first like a slow burning flame
but eventually
its out of control

they say your voice is the first to leave
but i wanna keep it locked up inside me
they say that memories are just dreams
but thats ok, thats good enough for me

i guess i shouldnt point my finger
they say its rude and impolite
to say not everyone does it
or that you did it out of spite

i would be lieing if i told you
that i didnt expect it to fall apart
i guess its true that were too young
to understand emotion or where it starts

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I've written guitar for both of these, just wondering what everyone thinks..
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Old 07-10-2004, 09:57 PM   #2
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I liked both lyrics, nice tight writing.
Keep reading over and re-writing until
you are satisfied that these songs carry
what you would like the listener to hear
in the final cut.

Excellent start. Nice story lines.

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