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06-16-2004, 05:40 AM
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I found you......Please critique.
I found you
(C) Realmouse2003
Verse 1
Love hid away from me,
The joy of being romantic,
In a maze of uncertainty,
Couldn't find my way around it,
I felt like giving up,
Inside a wave, I was almost drowning,
When you, came to my rescue,
Stabilized emotions inside me,
Chorus
Something happened,
On the way to find myself,
I found you,
Something happened,
On the way to find myself,
I found you,
Verse 2
Caught in the eye of a storm,
Trapped emotionally,
Temperature's starting to fall,
A wall closes in on me,
Thought I'd had enough,
Inside, I was almost dying,
When you, came to my rescue,
Stabilized emotions inside me,
Chorus
Something happened,
On the way to find myself,
I found you,
Something happened,
On the way to find myself,
I found you,
Bridge
You are my pilot,
I am your plane,
Fly me anywhere crazy,
Through licorice clouds,
Lamington kiss's,
I can taste, your love baby,
When cupid gives the sign,
It's time to fly,
Chorus
Something happened,
On the way to find myself,
I found you,
Something happened,
On the way to find myself,
I found you,
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06-16-2004, 08:57 AM
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*is impressed*
sorry i haven't the time to write much right now but when i come back i will make a bee-line to it!
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06-16-2004, 11:53 AM
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Mouse
Raejon where do I start? Should I copy the whole thing, paste it in between quotes and then say this is my favorite part???? I loved this. \  / You have out done yourself. I loved every word. My absolute favorite part is this :
Quote:
You are my pilot,
I am your plane,
Fly me anywhere crazy,
Through licorice clouds,
Lamington kiss's,
I can taste, your love baby,
When cupid gives the sign,
It's time to fly,
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Can't wait to hear this with music. Any thoughts to what kind of sound? Wonderful mate, simply wonderful.
Nae 
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06-16-2004, 02:00 PM
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Mouse
One thing Raejon, probably sounds stupid, but please explain:
Don't want to miss a thing.
Thanks,
Nae
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06-16-2004, 04:17 PM
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Wow Nae, you found what you were looking for.
The quote thang. Amazing..
Have you got this one yet.[an:e59f7a2de3]
The authors note..hehehehe[/an:e59f7a2de3]
Thanks Hollyoake for your kind words,
I hope you enjoy visiting your pregnant
friends.
Quote:
One thing Raejon, probably sounds stupid, but please explain:
Lamington kiss's,
Don't want to miss a thing.
Thanks,
Nae
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Don't be hard on yourself "Nae" it doesn't
sound stupid
Lamington is a cake here in NZ it's
pretty tasty, that's why I used it in this
lyric. I'll give you the recipe for it, It's
only easy to make.
First you buy a log sponge
Then you make a strawberry
jelly. "Don't" let the jelly set..
You will have to dip the sponge in jelly
until covered, then pull it out and sprinkle
heaps of coconut over it?
That's about it..
Chocolate lamington is made the same
way, you will have to melt "choc buttons"
then dip y'all sponge in the melted chocolate.
Sprinkle with coconut thingies and the rest
is history..
"Coconut sprinkles" I think
I hope I haven't confused you..
Thanks Nae and Hollyoake..
It's all good ......Mouse..
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06-16-2004, 04:32 PM
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The sounds Kinda slow Soul music.
I hope..
Best wishes...Mouse..
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06-17-2004, 09:10 AM
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Soul Music
Soul Music sounds good to me. Will Dee be singing it??? Please say yes, I love her voice. Or is it a man thing???? I guess it is a man thing. Hmmm, will you be singing???
Nae
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07-20-2004, 03:14 AM
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Dee's pregnant, I'm in limbo at the mo'.
Thanks for reading my friend.
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07-20-2004, 08:13 AM
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*is still impressed*
i can find no fault with this piece mouse, i like every word. when will we be hearing it?
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