Thread: Peace bride (Pippa Bacca)

Hi friends.. This is a song which made me cry when I was writing it... it's all about Pippa Bacca who murdered in 2008 during her travel for peace... She started her travel in Italy by hitchhiking but unfortunately she was murdered in my country Turkey... Please don't think we all killers in Turkey I always swear to killer, I hate him... Here is the song...




PEACE BRIDE (PIPPA BACCA)


-VERSE 1-
Can you forgive us?
Can you forgive bias?
Pippa Bacca
Peace of art...


Can forgive evil?
I know it's not able
Pippa Bacca
Peace angel...


You thought there was no devil
They are here but not invisible
They can bite your innocence
But you won't die, never and never


-CHORUS-
The white dressed peace bride
The passinger of wayside
Waiting for a car
Didn't even know the driver was her rapist cretin


She is the hitchhiking girl
The passinger of the world
Waiting for a bird
to peace for flyin' a fish to the deepest ocean


-VERSE 2-
Can you forgive us?
Can you forgive now?
Pippa Bacca
Peace of art...


And now it's our time
Cause we are alive
Pippa Bacca
Forgive us...


You thought there was no devil
They are here but not invisible
They can bite your innocence
But you won't die, never and never


-CHORUS-
The white dressed peace bride
The passinger of wayside
Waiting for a car
Didn't even know the driver was her rapist cretin


She is the hitchhiking girl
The passinger of the world
Waiting for a bird
to peace for flyin' a fish to the deepest

The words are good but it seems like if you were to sing it some of the lines seem to be of pretty different lengths. If that works for the structure of your song then great but it might make it difficult

thats a nice tribute to Her, this really would make a song with a little more meter in it.
some lines throw me off a bit, as far as meaning.

I liked the idea and the words. Figuring out how to put it to music might be interesting, although I would enjoy hearing how it turns out.

Thank you dear friends, this song makes me cry :/