Thread: All That We Had (All That We Gave)

I'm sick of all your noise girl, try to keep it down
How can I stare at you when you're looking at the ground?
Lay it all on me, oh, get it off your chest
Why won't you love me, why won't you nest?


I faintly recall a time when all we used to have
Was a single friend who counted all the days that past
I remember you being nervous as our hands glued into one
Saying you didn't deserve me while my heart had fell a tonne


Our book is in the pages, there's chapters yet to go
Stories yet to tell, the hate is bound to show
Mumbling words won't save a day, won't last a week or more
Phoning me from the bedroom shouting "remember when, before..."


(Chorus)
We took all that we had
Another drunken love
Made some of it last
Wasn't sober enough


The kids they know but nothing, trust is no big deal
Fear is just a silly game, like 'the world out there is real'
Paint your pretty pictures, hang them on your wall
Remember doing that painting the first time you begin to fall


Slowly the clock ticks by as all your friends begin to lie
Beginning to suspect everyone, best friends are always sly
The girls, man, they get meaner, every single year
Wonder how you'll cope and looks who's joined the club of fear


(Chorus)
We took all that we had
Another drunken love
We made some of it last
Wasn't sober enough
You made me all that's happy
I made you all that's sad
Whichever way you want to think
Neither of us regret the past

These are beautiful. They have a really poetic sound to them, and I like that. I was singing my way through it a little, and it came out sounding kind of folk-sy. Have you got a certain sound that you imagine these lyrics with?

I love your first verse. It puts an image in my head, but the rhythm of the words still sounds like music. I also really like your line "our book is in the pages, there's a chapter left to go." It may just be because I like reading, but I love the imagery there. It makes it sound exciting, but ominous at the same time, since the last chapter of a good book is exciting, since you know you'll finish the story, but it's sad because it's the end. Anyways, yeah. I loved that line a lot.

Thank you for taking the time to read and give feedback, I really appreciate it! I don't think someone has ever been so kind about my writing.

I imagine a sort of folk/Indie feel to it (at least that's what was going through my head at the time of writing it). I try my best to have a few lines in a song that relate to what I'm going through at the time and also stand out. "Our book is in the pages, there's chapters yet to go" was also my favorite line, it basically gives you the feel of the whole song in one line. Thanks again for the feedback, I'll be glad to read any of your forthcoming posts.