Thread: Chasing

Don't know how to delete my last post so sorry if you find another post so quickly as "spamming".

When I was younger women weren't an object
But as I've grown older they've became some sort of project
Keeping my highs at the lowest point
Cheering me up, fetching me my coins
Lately's a time where they keep on coming
I can't stand up without ladies running
Precious blue eyes and a tight skirt
Unzipping my fly, rolling in the dirt
I take a long walk, all we're doing is talking
But when I get home I find that you were blocking
Out some things that you coulda mentioned
Like five other guys waiting with fists clenching
Most of you girls are flirting continuosly
Why do you think I move on just after you've kissed me?
It's not because I disliked the way you laughed
No ones imperfections are gonna chop in half
The way I feel for a beautiful chick
If we get on and click then I will stick
I'm not saying I'm a perfect lover
I've cheated before like I was undercover
But every motive has its reason
Even if it's cheating there's listening for believing
Don't take away a mans chance before he gets a chance
Because interupting anything with choice is no demand

(Chorus)
Honey don't be a fool
Chasing men who ain't chasing you
Baby I'm listening, but who's
Chasing men who ain't chasing you

Should I choose a home or stay out late in the clubs
Become a family man and stay away from the thugs
Commitment's always scared me away from the truth
I might not find a girl who'll care to ask about my youth
Horrors don't scare me and neither do killers
What scares me is life and the people who are winners
Sacrifice compells you to succeed in your life
What if I don't live up to my family's heights
You'll notice I've went from females to expectating life
They both match up to complete all of your nights
You won't find a girl who'll be loving you right
Until a certain age, then a spark sets your sights
Common sense goes a long way if you think
Think before you act, before you look over and wink
Power is in the people but a person ain't wise
Until he dies for a love he's once had by his side
I once met this girl when we were only fourteen
Her name was Denise, the prettiest I'd ever seen
Always had a smile, never one to tell a lie
Until one tuesday night she phoned me up, she cried;
"I think we need a long break away from each other
My love for you has gone, we can't ever be lovers."
She told me the story of how she met this new guy
He wasn't like me, he didn't care, he was sly
Cheated and dumped me, broke my heart in the same night
I changed my ways of treatment then and there and lost my pride

(Chorus)
Honey don't be a fool
Chasing men who ain't chasing you
Baby I'm listening, but who's
Chasing men who ain't chasing you

Chasing's a game we've all played once in our life
Whether we're chasing others or a paper plane in the sky
But I've rambled on enough about treating you right
I think I heard the door, I'm heading out in the light

sweetness!

This is okay, but your verses are pretty long. It is a good idea, a topic many can relate to which is always good. Just some advice, you should write your verses in an 8 chord block. Then comes your chorus, another 8 chord block, chorus, bridge, chorus. That is how songs are written. If you try singing what you write it can be a little easier. Writing with a beat playing is a good idea.

I love these lines:

Honey don't be a fool
Chasing men who ain't chasing you

Long verses, yes. Is there anything you don't love in here? If so, edit it out. If not, keep it as is.

"What scares me is life and the people who are winners"
like it!