Thread: you

Just another day, I'm happy and I'm sad..
You don't care about me,
You don't wanna know my name..
You say hi with no emotion,
It makes me feel so hopeless..

If I tell you why, If I show you who I am..
Would you care enough to say good day...

You, I can't help but look at you,
It makes me feel so down,
If you only knew how much I would love to
Be with you..Tell you why, What's going on on my mind..
You..Bring it out in me..You..I sing this for..you..

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Hoping for How are you?
Thinking about love, what it'd be like to have
You as my all..If your heart said goodbye..
Helpless, Stupid, Closed up inside..
You move on..

You, I can't help but look at you,
It makes me feel so down,
If you only knew how much I would love to
Be with you..Tell you why, What's going on on my mind..
You..Bring it out in me..You..I sing this for..you..

I, don't care who you hide from..
I..don't care if you kiss her..
Hurts-not a word I would use..
Dead but with feelings for you..
Don't care, do you?

You, I can't help but look at you,
It makes me feel so down,
If you only knew how much I would love to
Be with you..Tell you why, What's going on on my mind..
You..Bring it out in me..You..I sing this for..you..

I think that you are on your way. Maybe you could take a few words of "you" out and firm up some of the lines. .just as long as it does not take away from the tune... (Not sure, what that would be, but I am sure it would be great.) e.g.: “If you only knew how much I would love to Be with you." could you say: "if you only knew how much I long to be with you?" e.g. leave out "bring it out in me" and stick to "I sing this for you" Only my opinion...but then it is all up to you.........good write...