Thread: The Stann Creek Valley Road

Daddy rode the thunder,
Daddy rode the wind,
Daddy drove on the Stann Creek line
and I remember when.

I remember when the shiny rail
was all the road we had
though it was covered up and gone
while I was yet a lad.

From Middlesex to Commerce Bight
down through the orchards green,
the wealth of Stann Creek Valley rolled
to lands we'd never seen.

Seven Sisters were the bridges named
along that narrow track,
and I'd give all that I have
if I could now go back.

But all of that is past and gone,
smooth highway's all we see,
The people on the busses never
think what used to be.

Too few of us recall that time,
Too few of us still care,
Too few of us remember
when the shiny rail was there.

Daddy rode the thunder,
Daddy rode the wind,
Daddy drove on the Stann Creek line
and I remember when.

It'a very hard for me to critique songs...but I gave it a shot...I really liked this and the picture it painted was clear...but I got a little bogged down on this verse...now put it to music and post it...

Seven Sisters were the bridges named
along that narrow track,
and I would give all that I have
if I could now go back.

Terrib - I think the problem is in that third line, which does not scan as it should.

Try this -
Seven Sisters were the bridges named
along that narrow track,
and I'd give all that I have
if I could now go back.

Also the 'seven' would be need to be unaccented.

The Stann Creek Valley Road was a narrow-gauge railroad in the days with the Stann Creek Valley was the centre of banana production in British Honduras. Bananas were shipped down to the port at Commerce Bight by Grigadan, now Dangriga Town. The valley's all citrus now, banana production has moved farther south, and the railroad bed is the foundation for a paved road. Only four of the original cast concrete Seven Sisters remain - the others have been replaced by steel bridges.

Thanks for pointing that out. Any other suggestions?