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    Behind the wall of freedom

    Synopsis:

    These lyrics are concept fantasy story with real elements from history.

    Short storyline:
    The story is about a me (as a storyteller) and my best friend John. We are living in East Berlin that is cut off from West Berlin by the Berlin wall. We decide to emigrate to West Berlin where we think there is freedom. I make it to West Berlin but my friend John is shot on the Berlin wall. Living in West Berlin I realize that there is no freedom here either and people are controlled by corporations and money. After the fall of the Berlin wall I return to former East Berlin. I wonder whether people achieve to take the best elements from both worlds in rising united country.

    Long storyline:
    The story is about me (as a storyteller) and my friend John. We are living in East Berlin that is cut off from West Berlin by the Berlin wall. I am in childhood, living careless and in innocence and so I care only for playing games and having fun.
    (songs „Childhood in innocence“ and „Careless“).
    One day my best friend John plays a cassette of some rock band from West Berlin to me. Albums of the rock band is forbidden in East Berlin and I even don´t know about this sort of music. I like it very much. John tells me he wants to emigrate to West Berlin to listen to this music freely and to live in freedom. Then John offers me to go with him. I love music very much. The music that John has given to me and he´s opened his eyes.
    (song „Open my eyes“).
    Adulting I´m listening more albums of rock bands and from their lyrics I realize that I live in country where „freedom“ is just a word and lies are told to me. After four years I decide to emigrate, what is considered in my country like „crime of treason of Democratic republic“. So I and my friend John become partners in crime.
    (song „Decision – Partners in crime“)
    We emigrate on a new years morning when watch guards are drunk. When John as the last is climbing from the wall he is shot. I want to rescue him but John argues to leave him and run. John dies.
    (song „Escape“)
    I´m finally in promised land (West Berlin), but my best friend John is dead.
    (song „Tears for a Dead“)
    I´m coming to a city and I´m overwhelmed by Brave new world and I´m staring at music shop where are all albums of rock bands that are forbiddden in my country.
    (song „Brave new world“)
    After six months living in West Berlin I have opened my eyes two times more. I realize that not all things that glitter are gold even in so called „Democracy“. I realize that here another hidden dictators such as corporations and money are ruling. Then I compare my country (where people have no rights to change it) to this country (where people have rights to change it but they are lazy or afraid of losing their jobs).
    (song „Instant clarity - Open my eyes part II.)
    Finally the Berlin wall falls and I can come back home.
    (song „Return“)
    After almost one year since my escape I´m standing at my best friend John´s grave and thinking about my blame for John´s death because if we´d waited one more year John have could lived. Then I ask myself „Where freedom lies?“ because I have been in all both worlds and I haven´t found it. I wonder whether people achieve to take the best elements from both worlds in rising united country.
    (song“ Where freedom lies“)


    Side A: Before
    01. Everything´s pink (Intro)
    02. Childhood in Innocence
    03. Careless
    04. Open My Eyes
    05. Decision (Partners in Crime)
    06. Escape

    Side B: Behind
    07. Sorrow and sadness (Intro)
    08. Tears for a Dead
    09. Brave New World
    10. Instant Clarity (Open My Eyes part II.)
    11. Return
    12. Where Freedom Lies


    01. Everything´s pink (Intro)


    02. Childhood in Innocence

    I was born in this country
    Raised in blocks of concrete
    Spent days outside with my
    Friends and lots of fun

    No big problems at school
    As I kept right their rules
    Did my homeworks and then
    Played games in the sun

    Chorus 1:
    Those were the days of my life
    Blood in my veins boiling wild
    Pain changing fast into smile
    No doubt and fear in my mind

    Lived every second at full
    Everyday was something new
    didn´t care for future
    there was just here and now

    Learnt to know what is right
    Without wondering why
    Took everything as it was
    Natural somehow

    Chorus 2:
    Those were the days of my life
    Blood in my veins boiling wild
    Pain changing fast into smile
    No doubt and fear in my mind
    For everything there was a sense
    In my childhood in innocence

    Solo

    Chorus 2:
    Those were the days of my life
    Blood in my veins boiling wild
    Pain changing fast into smile
    No doubt and fear in my mind
    For everything there was a sense
    In my childhood in innocence

    In my childhood…in innocence… in innocence…in…innocence!!!


    03. Careless

    How I envy you my younger me
    You´re living your life without misery
    Misery of knowledge waiting for
    Your brain to attack and start an endless war

    How I envy you my younger me
    You´re using your mind just for fantasy
    Wild wind in your hair sun in the sky
    Friends and games to play all you needed that time

    Bridge:
    Without questions…there are no answers
    Where is no why…there´s no because
    Without doubts…there are no reasons
    With your mind free…you´re not lost

    Chorus:
    Careless you were
    Careless you were…careless in your mind
    careless in your soul
    Careless you were
    Careless you were…careless in your smile
    and your eyes show

    Solo

    How I envy you my younger me
    Living in your small world so easy and free
    In your taintless mind there was no mess
    ´till your conscience be put to the daily tests

    Bridge:

    Chorus:

    Bridge:

    Chorus:

    Careless you were
    Careless you were
    Careless you were
    Careless you were


    04. Open My Eyes

    Sitting in my best friend John´s room
    Waiting what´s to be
    „Show you something that will blow you“
    He says smiling at me

    Put a cassette to a player
    Second he´s waiting
    „It´s from a place behind the wall“
    He is whispering

    And then…push a button…called play
    And it´s playing
    And it´s screaming…beating to my mind
    And it´s yelling
    And it´s soaring…black wind fast and wild

    What is this I like it?
    I´ve never heard before
    It´s moving with my body
    Invading to my core

    Bridge:
    With botton play
    He changed my way
    Feel something strange
    Never be the same!

    Chorus:
    He´s opened my eyes…clear a haze of tomorrow
    New horizons drawing near
    He´s opened my eyes…light up my shadows
    I´m feeling the end is here
    He´s opened my eyes…taking my shadows
    Shadows that covering me
    He´s opened my eyes…voices to follow
    Calling that I´m not free

    Something in this music
    Lyrics and melodies
    Has started something in me
    Is it life what it seems?

    Bridge:
    With button play
    He changed my way
    Feel I was tamed
    Never be the same!

    Chorus:

    Solo:

    John´s whispering:

    „Listen to me John´s whispering
    This cassette is just a little piece
    From the place behind the wall…wall
    One day I will get there
    Because I want to know more…to know more
    Swear you don´t tell it anybody
    it´s just between you and me
    Think about it if you want more…want more
    Because oneday you can go with me“

    You can go with me
    You can go with me
    You can go with me
    You can go with me…behind the wall
    You can go with me…behind the wall
    You can go with me…if you want more
    You can go with me…behind the wall…recall in my ears
    You can go with me…behind the wall…like a distant dream
    You can go with me…if you want more…echoes in my ears
    You can go with me…behind the wall…that could be real
    You can go with me
    You can go with me
    You can go with me
    You can go with me
    You can go with me


    05. Decision (Partners in Crime)

    Wake up sweating again
    Like almost every sleepless night
    „You can go with me“ (behind the wall)
    Returning echoes in my mind

    It has been four long years
    Since he pushed the button play
    Adulting now I am
    Leaving my small world everyday

    Bridge:
    Oh John what have you done to me?!

    Chorus:
    I want to know more than
    Will ever find in my land
    Keep on fighting my fear
    Crime of treason…they call it here

    Hearing music I see
    What I have never seen before
    More prooves day by day
    I´m just a puppet in someone´s show

    Bridge:
    Oh John why have you chosen me?!

    Chorus:
    I want to go behind
    The wall where freedom lies
    Raise up my voice of heart
    But make a decision is so hard
    Decision to be partners in crime

    Solo

    My mind is breaking out
    In a storm of knowledge and the other questions
    the other questions
    the other questions!!!

    Is it truth what we learn in school
    About our history?
    Is it truth we can speak fearless
    In freedom and liberty?
    Is it truth we´re not just a flock
    Of the same obeying sheep?
    Is it truth that the wall´s been built
    To protect not to keep?

    No it´s not…now I know
    No it´s not…truth´s been shown
    No it´s not…truth has died
    No it´s not…we used to lies

    Solo

    Bridge:
    Oh John thank you for chosing me

    Chorus:
    Yes I will go behind
    I have made up my mind
    With John heading for a fate
    My decision has been made now
    Decision to be partners in crime



    06. Escape

    Before my eyes I see it like
    it´s happening again
    secret gather of chosen ones
    preparing for a plan

    „Exactly in a month since now
    Meeting at one a.m.
    Behind abandoned watch tower
    Everybody undestand?“

    Now I´m standing here with a fear in the dark
    With my friend John and the other two guys
    Who John´s contacted to take us behind
    No returning back now we´re on the run

    Bridge:
    Towards to our destination
    Take it at all costs
    Heading for a new horizons
    Freedom for us all

    Chorus:
    We´re on the run…escape…escape
    We´re on the run
    We´re on the run…escape…escape
    We´re on the run

    This area around the wall
    Isn´t watched in this time
    Of a new year celebration
    Drunken voices from a far

    Bridge:
    Towards to our destination
    Take it at all costs
    Heading for a new horizons
    Freedom for us all

    Chorus:
    We´re on the run…escape…escape
    We´re on the run
    We´re on the run…escape…escape
    We´re on the run

    Solo

    We´re almost on the other side
    John´s climbing as the last
    Everything is going on as plan
    Until I hear shot!



    John has fallen and now he´s lying
    Blood rose on his shirt
    Down on my knees his hand I´m taking
    Clearing it from a dirt

    „John I´m not gonna leave you here
    Come on on my back“
    „Don´t be a fool man I´m too heavy
    Finish our escape!“
    „Because everyone who makes even
    Slight crack in the wall
    Brings a little piece of freedom
    Freedom to us all…so run!...run!!!

    Oh no
    Oh noo
    John no
    Oh noo
    John no
    Oh nooo

    Solo

    Farewell John…Farewell


    07. Sorrow and Sadness (Intro)


    08. Tears for a Dead

    The first ray of a new dawn
    In the land of the free
    Is bringing sorrow instead
    Of hapiness to me
    My best friend John has died few hours ago

    Growing up together
    Since school where we´ve met
    We have been like brothers
    In good times and bad
    it´s been his dream to go behind the wall

    Bridge:
    The hand of fate is strange so strange
    Yes I should be in his place
    Yes I should be

    Chorus:
    Tears for a Dead Friend
    The best friend of mine
    Tears for pity him
    For our dream he died
    Tears for a Dead
    Tears for a Dead
    Tears for a Dead

    Solo

    Has it been worth indeed
    The highest price in life?
    I know what John would tell
    It has the reason´s why
    To bring a little piece of freedom to us all

    Bridge:

    Chorus:
    Tears for a Dead Friend
    The best friend of mine
    Tears for pity him
    For our dream he died
    Tears for a Dead
    Tears for a Dead
    Tears for a Dead

    Chorus:
    Tears for a Dead Friend
    In free land he died
    Tears for his memory
    he´s now my guiding light
    Tears for a Dead
    Tears for a Dead
    Tears for a Dead
    Tears for a Dead
    Tears for a Dead

    … he´s now my guiding light


    09. Brave new world

    I am coming to big city
    Shining through the night
    Feeling vibrations so pretty
    Hypnotized by the lights

    Brand new cars of all famous marks
    Are passing me by
    Clear sidewalks and trees in green parks
    It must be paradise

    Bridge:
    I am in the land of the free
    See what I have seen in my dreams
    Hapiness and joy now I feel
    In a brave new world

    Chorus:
    Brave New world
    Brave New world
    It´s a Brave New world

    No more words
    No more words
    can´t describe what I see

    Brave New world
    Brave New world
    It´s a Brave New world

    Before music shop I´m staring
    My eyes open wide
    Forbidden albums in my country
    Here fearless I can buy

    Everything is reconstructed
    No debris in sight
    So people may be free-hearted
    I see prooves all around

    Bridge:
    In the land of the free I stand
    Yes my dreams have come true at last
    Future lies only in my hands
    In a brave new world

    Chorus:
    Brave New world
    Brave New world
    It´s a Brave New world

    No more words
    No more words
    can´t describe what I feel

    Brave New world
    Brave New world
    It´s a Brave New world

    Bridge:
    In the land of the free I stand
    Yes my dreams have come true at last
    Future lies only in my hands
    In a brave new world

    Chorus:
    Brave New world
    Brave New world
    It´s a Brave New world

    No more words
    No more words
    can´t describe what I see

    No more words
    No more words
    can´t describe what I feel

    Brave New world
    Brave New world
    It´s a Brave New world

    Brave New world
    Brave New world
    can´t describe what I see
    It´s a Brave New world

    Brave New world
    Brave New world
    can´t describe what I feel
    It´s a Brave New world
    Brave New world
    Brave New world
    It´s a Brave New world


    10. Instant Clarity (Open My Eyes part II.)

    Sitting in a smoky bar
    Right now is celebration time
    Today it has been six months
    Since I´ve come here for a new life

    Immigration office helped me
    With many things to my new start
    Living in two rooms appartment
    And I´m working at a food store

    Chorus:
    In the land of occasions
    Hardworking man can reach his aims
    And fortune favours the best
    Hold to my destinations
    Step by step I am on my way
    To get to the top at last

    Drinking another cold beer
    Oh John how I wish you were here
    With me to live in liberty
    Help me with my new destiny

    I feel something wrong around me
    Day by day I realize
    Nothing is what it seems to be
    Pink (coloured) glasses falling from my eyes

    Chorus:
    In the land of delusion
    No matter of ability
    Corruption and money rule
    Believing in illusions
    Now I am starting to see
    Something here is rotten too

    Solo

    So bittersweet is a taste
    Of freedom in this state
    For money that godlike
    People break human rights

    Mrs Justice is a blind
    Paper money on her eyes
    She judges right for those
    Whose alibies are gold

    Now it really seems to me
    They have the same enemy
    Like we have in my country
    Just in a different disguise

    Enemy is dictating
    How to live, what to think
    What to buy, what to eat
    In their submitted lives

    In contract to my land
    They have options to change
    But they don´t really care…overrulled by laziness
    And they will never dare…upon them fear reigns
    No!
    They will never dare
    No!
    White flags everywhere
    No!

    Solo

    No!
    Anymore!
    I´m not watching
    Now I see!!!

    I´ve opened my eyes…clear a haze of illusions
    Nothing is really what it seems
    I´ve opened my eyes…grab a mask of delusion
    That was told in our stories
    I´ve opened my eyes…see a reign of corruption
    Ruling with power of money
    I´ve opened my eyes…see through all illusions
    In a state of instant clarity

    Sitting in an empty bar
    I know I will never come
    Back home to see my family
    Tell them for all troubles…I´m so sorry


    11. Return

    Radio broadcast:
    „Today in sixth of August 1989
    Will be festively put one brick out of the wall
    The wall that has been dividing
    One nation into two enemy camps
    For almost thirty years…!

    I can´t believe in my eyes
    Staring at a gathering
    Now before the wall so high
    People crying and screaming

    Hear can´t believe in my ears
    It´s a rising of sanity
    Fear suddenly dissapears
    Freedom´s again at liberty

    Bridge:
    I raise my head with expactions
    As all people around me
    Some of them have given up hope
    After neverending years

    Chorus 1:
    The wall will be no more
    Bricks falling one by one
    What I thought would never come
    Now it´s happening right here before my eyes

    I wish you were by my side
    Oh John why can´t you be here
    To see the wall is trembling
    The wall that didn´t let you live

    How many lives took ´till now
    Goddamn wall built by man´s hand
    Now it´s the final countdown
    They didn´t die in vain John said

    Bridge:
    „Because everyone who made even
    Slight crack in the goddamn wall
    Brough a little piece of freedom
    Freedom to us all“

    Chorus2 :
    Now I´m coming home
    The wall is falling down
    What I thought would never come
    Now I´m smiling with big tears in my eyes

    Solo

    Chorus 2:

    Chorus:
    Now I´m coming home
    The wall is falling down
    Freedom has come for all
    Now I´m smiling with big tears in my eyes

    Solo

    I´m coming back
    I will return
    And I´ll carry a torch of freedom that I´ll burn
    Here is the fire
    Here is the force
    For everyone to make a freedom take its course


    12. Where Freedom Lies

    John I´m standing here
    At your grave at last
    it´s after almost one year
    since you have died…died in my arms

    Question in my head
    Will never leave me be
    If we´ve waited just one year
    You could have lived…just one more year
    You could have lived

    Chorus:
    To get to the promised land
    Where Freedom lies
    Behind the wall to dreamland
    Where Freedom lies
    Where Freedom lies
    Where Freedom lies

    John I have been there
    at place behind the wall
    nothing is like in our dreams
    I´ve seen it all…behind curtain call
    I´ve seen it all

    Chorus:
    In the land we did long for
    Where Freedom lies
    Behind the wall we all thought
    Where Freedom lies
    Where Freedom lies
    Where Freedom lies

    Before the wall prisoners live
    They´ve got no rights to take
    Control of their own destiny
    Under opressing reign of state

    Behind the wall free lazy live
    They´ve given rights to take
    Control of their own destiny
    To hidden dictators to reign

    Chorus:
    So tell me now after all
    Where Freedom lies
    Behind the wall or before
    Where Freedom lies
    Where Freedom lies
    Where Freedom lies

    Before the wall behind the wall
    Doesn´t matter a place
    I have been there I´ve seen it all
    freedom´s dying in disgrace

    Forevermore the wall is over
    New world will be reborn
    East and west putting together
    Freedom must live on again

    Will we ever find remains of
    Freedom in all both sides
    Will we make it will we go forth
    To find a place where freedom lies
    To find a place where freedom lies (where…freedom lies)

    …You can go with me…behind the wall
    You can go with me…behind the wall
    You can go with me…if you want more
    You can go with me…behind the wall…

    …I want to go behind
    The wall where freedom lies…

    …Because everyone who makes even
    Slight crack in the wall
    Brings a little piece of freedom
    Freedom to us all…

    …So bittersweet is a taste
    Of freedom in this state
    For money that godlike
    People break human rights…
    Last edited by Hugozhor; 09-21-2010 at 01:38 PM. Reason: rework

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    A big, impressive project. a couple of small nits "If we've waited one more year" should be we'd for 'we had' rather than 'we have' and I think you mean proofs for prooves.
    In your storyline you take some linguistic short cuts, this is not a good idea, it is the first thing people will read and so should be totally correct, eg.

    Short storyline:
    It´s what? this is the first word 'The Album is' about a boy (who is the storyteller) and his friend John who are living in East Berlin that is cutt one t off from West Berlin by the Berlin wall. They decide to emigrate to West Berlin where they think there is freedom. The boy makes it to West Berlin but his friend John is shot on the Berlin wall. Living in West Berlin the boy realizes that there isn´t freedom too is no freedom here either and people are controlled by corporations and money. After the fall of the Berlin wall the boy returns to former East Berlin and he thinks if people achieve to take the best elements from both worlds as totalitary East Berlin and capitalistic West Berlin in future united country. This is a confused sentence, 'if' requires 'then'.
    I liked the way you used 'Brave new world', I instantly remembered that the hero hangs himself at the end of that book and got a good clue where you were going with it, this strikes me as one of the better things I have read in this forum, though I am no great shakes as a lyricist and no doubt others will have more revealing comments, good luck and welcome to the forum, Olly

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    Thank you very much for Your comments and advice. I need this feedback to realize my mistakes and correct them.

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    I reworked synopsis.

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    Way too long for one post....You completely lost my interest within the first few lines... I would NOT recommend posting a entire musical stage production.... A stage musical has three parts: script, lyrics and music. First write the script.... Get the storyline tight.... then work on the lyrics & music..Then register it and start hunting for a backer........And I sure would never post the script for anyone to see. You want criticizes on individual pieces you can post them but don't give away your entire story or explain them.. A lyric should be able to stand on it's own regardless.)

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    Thank you for your useless lesson about stage production
    One question: How many concept albums lyrics have you written to judge concept albums?

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    Hugozhor, your snide "thank you" was very uncalled and unnecessary. Please note that the information was not provided for you alone but for all as comments can tend to assist not merely the poster, if at all, but others who read it as well. This may or may not be something you are aware of or care about but regardless it is still so. My words were straight forward with nothing attached to them and certainly not ego based.

    Good luck in all your endeavors.)))))
    Last edited by MTMarshall; 09-25-2010 at 06:10 AM.

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    Hugozor:

    It is evident that you have put a great deal of thought into this and I commend you for your hard work.

    Might I ask your age?
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    Quote Originally Posted by Hugozhor View Post
    Thank you for your useless lesson about stage production
    One question: How many concept albums lyrics have you written to judge concept albums?
    When posting your work on these forums, you should expect some help, and if the help includes criticism (even criticism you disagree with), it's good to take the help and choose yourself whether to follow through with it or not without disrespectfully judging the criticism to the critic.

    I agree with MTMarshall in that - though many artists have a theme to the lyrics in an album, and can often add those themes to the album itself - the lyrics themselves tell the story for the reader/listener (depending if any music gets added to the album), and so to explain it to them in a paragraph beforehand can seem quite patronising. I understand you want whoever reads/listens to understand the story of the album fully so they can interpret the lyrics with that in mind, but the songs are quite clear-cut as they are.

    I commend you for your effort, Hugozhor. There are still a few grammatical errors that need to be addressed, and I suggest going through every lyric with a fine-tooth-comb. Along the way, you might see some room for improvement in the lyrics. Read it through and correct it (a few times should be fine), and then I think you'll find you'll be much happier with the results.

    Good luck in the gruelling editing process, Hugozhor!

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    Quote Originally Posted by MJ Preston View Post
    Hugozor:

    It is evident that you have put a great deal of thought into this and I commend you for your hard work.

    Might I ask your age?
    Thank you.

    I´m 31.

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    Quote Originally Posted by SoNickSays... View Post
    I agree with MTMarshall in that - though many artists have a theme to the lyrics in an album, and can often add those themes to the album itself - the lyrics themselves tell the story for the reader/listener (depending if any music gets added to the album)...
    I commend you for your effort, Hugozhor. There are still a few grammatical errors... Good luck in the gruelling editing process, Hugozhor!
    I understand you about publishing theme to lyrics. That´s why I added note "sinopsys" so everyone can choose to read lyrics with theme or without. Maybe I should replace sinopsys at the end of the thread.

    About grammatical errors. English is not my native language so I can´t notice some errors reading it again.

    Thank you for your reply.

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    Quote Originally Posted by MTMarshall View Post
    Hugozhor, your snide "thank you" was very uncalled and unnecessary. Please note that the information was not provided for you alone but for all as comments can tend to assist not merely the poster, if at all, but others who read it as well. This may or may not be something you are aware of or care about but regardless it is still so. My words were straight forward with nothing attached to them and certainly not ego based.

    Good luck in all your endeavors.)))))
    I meant nothing bad. Just your words "You completely lost my interest within the first few lines" made me smile.
    So why did you reply to this thread when you lost your interest?

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