Thread: It Feels Like Pain

Where did i go wrong
I laughed at all your jokes
I didn't eat so i couldn't be
Speaking with my mouth full
But the words still came out un-used
And I couldn't stop anything you thought
Because i'm just a simple guy
Who has a crush on a pretty girl

(Chorus)
Take my memories away now
It's too painfull to watch all on my own
Every sleep is tireless...
From being the guy who you wanted me to be
It feels like pain

I watch you joke around at school
A joke that hurts me more
Than any other laughing matter could
And I feel crumbled up
After seeing your face smiling away

So where does the pain go to become healed
It chases after you
It'll cheer me up and then leave me for dead
That no medication can fix

(Chorus)
Take my memories away now
It's too painfull to watch all on my own
Every sleep is tireless...
From being the guy who you wanted me to be
It feels like pain

Stay forgetten where i am
I can't help but be abused
I have no idea of how to become "cool"
And I have no use to help out myself

It feels like pain
It feels like pain

It feels like...

Patrick, after reading this the first thing I noticed is that the first line is simple but fits with what comes the rest of the song. The next thing is that I like the title "Take My Memories Away" better than the current title. It seems more powerful to me. The last thing is that while everything seems to work well for the point of the song, some parts (mainly the chorus) don't read very well. Of course, this is a song and may work better when sung. Hope this helps a little.