Thread: Without a gun

(Mostly based off feelings of claustrophobia and fear in large cities)

If safety exists within the mind
Why do I hate myself all the time?
Pacing, scheming, scared of what I may do
I’m safe as fuck in my little room
I’m - so - scared - what’s out there?
Faces looking with their shallow eyes
Cloaking their malevolent disguise?
With quiet cries
I will not be confined to the shadows
I will not be locked away any further

Oh, what a frightful place!
Full of empty eyes and hollow space
These streets are full of indecencies
How can I feel safe without a gun?

Passerbys plotting my violent demise
Quiet protest, meaningless lies
You all think so high of me
But inside I’m so low I secretly just bleed
Bleed my time away, I watch you through the glass
Staring in, shatter it, these feelings will not pass
Confined - demise - I will make myself heard
I will live free or I will be burned

Oh, what a frightful place!
Full of empty eyes and hollow space
These streets are full of indecencies
How can I feel safe without a gun?
Without a gun?

It’s fine
I bought one
It’s large but fitting with an iron trigger
One fucking shot right between those eyes
Make sleeping beauty lose her sight
Lose her sight
She’ll be blind
Just - like -
ME

Oh, what a frightful place!
Full of empty eyes and hollow space
These streets are full of indecencies
How can I feel safe without a gun?
Oh, what a frightful place!
Full of empty eyes and hollow space
These streets are full of indecencies
How can I feel safe without a gun?
Oh, what a frightful place!
Full of empty eyes and hollow space
These streets are full of indecencies
How can I feel safe without a gun?
Without a gun?
Without a gun?
Gun
Gun
GUN!

You kind of slap our face with the message a bit. I mean, can you get more obvious than "I'm so scared, whats out there?"? I'm not sure there's much thats redeemable from this...maybe just start all over again, but with rather more subtlety? Pretty harsh I know, and I'm sorry, but that's what I see. Maybe someone else will disagree.

The title of this song immediately drew me in. I had a good idea of what I might be about to read and the lines were good for the most part. Though I didn't feel like the message was too in your face, I was a little offput by the third verse/bridge (should probably be rewritten) and didn't like the repetition of "gun" at the end of the song.