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  1. 01-19-2010 06:19 PM #1
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    I Watch The Rain

    I Watch The Rain
    (Female vocal)
    V
    We walked a ledge of love and lust
    Two shades behind the line of trust
    And he was mine, but not enough
    To stay the course when times got rough
    And times got rough, as times will do
    Which shouldn't mean, "Too bad, you lose"
    Please tell me why, why is it so
    The first to cry's the last to know
    CH
    I pull the curtains wide
    Gaze through the window pane
    And all the pain I feel
    Is gently washed away...
    As I watch the rain
    So I watch the rain
    V
    It's strange how quickly love takes root
    And dreams expand, horizons too
    Then in an instant plans can change
    I looked inside to place the blame
    And everyone could see but me
    He had the gift of doublespeak
    But half-baked words can't hide this truth
    Her perfumed scent in our bedroom

    I pull the curtains wide
    Gaze through the window pane
    And all the pain I feel
    Is gently washed away...
    As I watch the rain
    So I watch the rain

    BRIDGE
    An arc of color rises through the mist
    Like bended rays of hope, I hope there does exist
    A tranquil place out there beyond the tears
    Where bright tomorrows somehow reappear

    And all the pain I feel
    Is gently washed away...
    As I watch the rain
    So I watch the rain
    The rainbow through the rain
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  2. 01-19-2010 10:12 PM #2
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    it's always hard to critique a song...but I liked this...I am a little confused though...will this be a male/female duet ?
    On the one hand Nature urges us on to this desire by associating it with the noblest, most useful, and pleasant of all her acts; and on the other hand she allows us to condemn it and flee from it as from a shameless and immodest deed, to blush at it and recommend abstinence. Are we not indeed brutes to call the very act that created us, brutish?
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  3. 01-20-2010 07:49 AM #3
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    No, it's for a solo female. Says so right under the title!

    Thanks for having a look.
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  4. 01-21-2010 08:16 PM #4
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    I liked this. The only thing I could think was "I hope there does exist" might sound better as "I hope there exists" because the s at the end of the word doesn't take the rhyme away from mist and it sounds less awkward.
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  5. 01-21-2010 10:10 PM #5
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    ahhh...I see now...this had me a bit confused...but she caught the little bugger cheating eh?

    But half-baked words can't hide this truth
    Her perfumed scent in our bedroom
    On the one hand Nature urges us on to this desire by associating it with the noblest, most useful, and pleasant of all her acts; and on the other hand she allows us to condemn it and flee from it as from a shameless and immodest deed, to blush at it and recommend abstinence. Are we not indeed brutes to call the very act that created us, brutish?
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  6. 01-21-2010 10:46 PM #6
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    I loved the song, but I think the chorus could be more. It just doesn't seem as profound as the rest of the song.
    Full many a glorious morning have I seen
    Flatter the mountain tops with sovereign eye,
    Kissing with golden face the meadows green,
    Gilding pale streams with heavenly alchemy;
    - William Shakespeare
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  7. 01-23-2010 06:01 PM #7
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    Sorry folk, just wrote a lengthy response to each of you, only to have it say my "Token has expired!" Anyhow, I appreciate your comments.

    Ahsville, just saying 'exists' is tough if you pronounce it properly. Seems like singing would really be a booger!

    James, I thought a simple chorus would work nicely against the story. Just picture it being belted out by Celine!

    Terrib, glad we got to the same page!

    Thanks to you all.
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