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Old 10-09-2008, 10:44 PM   #1
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Shoo!

Hey, you, asexual fag!
How do you dare
to speak like that?!
Go fetch your clutch bag.
We’ll take you out.
Offer your bum to us,
We’ll make you fly
to Heaven
with a single kick.
You’ll have a nice trip!
Once there, relax,
go over your sad actions
and when you’re back,
you won’t be willing
to overexpose
your asshole that much.
You want our attention?
Well, we have to say
you’d better spare yourself
the tension
of bringing us
to your dimension.
Now, please, don’t yelp…
Your halitosis never helped.
We just can’t stand the stench.
Enough is enough.
Go take care of your
petty issues,
which are boring like hell.
Wipe your tears on
a box of tissues.
You’re pure bad taste.
Make haste!
We won’t miss you.
Shoo!
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Old 10-10-2008, 12:54 PM   #2
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Oh, lovely. Excuse me while I drown in sarcasm. I disliked this when I read the first line, and it cetainly never got better. Don't like the topic, don't like the style.
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Old 10-11-2008, 01:17 AM   #3
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Old 10-12-2008, 08:47 PM   #4
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Oh, lovely. Excuse me while I drown in sarcasm.
What's lovely? What are you trying to say?

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I disliked this when I read the first line, and it cetainly never got better. Don't like the topic, don't like the style.
So, it means that I'm on the right path... No, just kidding; any reaction is appreciated.
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Old 11-30-2008, 04:26 PM   #5
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Well, thank you for peeping.
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Old 12-01-2008, 08:02 AM   #6
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Old 12-01-2008, 08:22 PM   #7
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Misty Mr. Mystery,

I'm not a very perceptive individual. I appreciate you dedicated some time to post this poem here but don't have the least idea of your reasons to do so.
Surely you did it by mistake. Otherwise, I'd have to think you're teaching me ways to getting people's attention, in which case I must admit this is an original one.
And in order to celebrate this interesting happening, I invite everybody to post some of their writing here.
What d'ye think?
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Misty Mr. Mystery,

I'm not a very perceptive individual. I appreciate you dedicated some time to post this poem here but don't have the least idea of your reasons to do so.
Surely you did it by mistake. Otherwise, I'd have to think you're teaching me ways to getting people's attention, in which case I must admit this is an original one.
And in order to celebrate this interesting happening, I invite everybody to post some of their writing here.
What d'ye think?
Yeah, posting while you're tired does horrible things.
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Old 12-02-2008, 11:21 AM   #9
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Well it's quite agressive and shows some obvious hatred there.
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Oh, lovely. Excuse me while I drown in sarcasm. I disliked this when I read the first line, and it cetainly never got better. Don't like the topic, don't like the style.
Ditto.
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Old 12-09-2008, 03:21 PM   #11
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Thanks everybody.
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Ah, so you're just a dickwad. Makes sense now.
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As I read it, I was thinking "the writer must be like twelve, and just found out the meaning of halitosis, and wanted it to use it so he would look like he has a big vocabulary." I mean, are you serious? This reaks of immaturity and ignorance.
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I see one of two things:

1. an awkward, sophomoric attempt at jamaican style homophobic music; or

2. a not-so-subtle jab at the immature hate of Brandon McInerney and his ilk.

I would obviously prefer the latter, not just as a matter of ideological bent, but based ont he higher level of writing sophistication necessary to achieve it.
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Old 12-11-2008, 12:23 PM   #15
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First of all, I'd like to thank you all for your contribution.

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Ah, so you're just a dickwad. Makes sense now.
I don't think that what or who I am is relevant in this case. If you're interested in knowing me, a PM will suffice.

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As I read it, I was thinking "the writer must be like twelve, and just found out the meaning of halitosis, and wanted it to use it so he would look like he has a big vocabulary." I mean, are you serious? This reaks of immaturity and ignorance.
I don't think the writer's age is relevant in this case. If you're interested in knowing how old the writer is, PM me. Unfortunately, halitosis has always been a familiar word to me. As for the immaturity and ignorance's reek, I agree with you.

alanmt: your comments are profound, but I don't think homosexuals are the starring role here.
IMO, this piece shows enough sophistication as to make you say something about it, which, again, I do appreciate.

Like vehement flies' attracting plain sweet.

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