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Old 07-14-2008, 03:01 AM   #1
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So Hard

lean on me when you're not strong
trust in me to help you along
and by the time we've sung this song
we'll be halfway to the hell out of here

believe in me when i say i love you
don't you see you're all ive got to lose
without you im just another lonely fool
with no reason to his rhyme

you have got to be more than outside the ordinary
you're so hard that you're killing me softly

i needed someone with open arms
i needed someone with an open heart
you said to me 'i'd love to play the part'
if you can sing to me everyday and never lose your voice

and goddamnit if i didn't try
i sang out until my lungs grew dry
when the last note failed to satisfy
you killed me because you had no other choice

you have got to be more than outside the ordinary
you're so hard that you're killing me softly
i am a marionette and you hold my strings high above
one wrapped around each of your fingers; this is truly love
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Old 07-18-2008, 07:19 PM   #2
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I'm trying to say something nice even though I'm in a shitty mood...nothing against you if I say something I shouldn't...just a disclaimer.


I like it ok, but it seems a little forced. I don't really understand it. the last four words don't fit in at all.
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