
Originally Posted by
Bloggsworth
Several things, but two in particular. Why would anyone want to put it up on a hotel wall, most guests don't even read the safety instructions; and second, who is going to stand, looking at a wall, and read a story which may in no way relate to them; indeed, which they may see as being in some way accusatory in that they don't like to do what you like to do. It may be a short story, but it reads like a travel report with too much embellishment. As to the actual writing/grammar/syntax etc., I think that they are all secondary to the purpose if you are asking hotelliers and the like to affix it to their walls.
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