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Old 01-01-2008, 03:23 PM   #1
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Talking Aww I did this when I was 12

Hello, I did when I was 12. It's not great but it's not that bad...is it?



George looked so happy, sitting beside me in our first class flight to Disneyland, it had always been one of his dreams to go to Disneyland to see Mickey Mouse.
THUD. I shot straight forward luckily a large airbag was there to save us. A scream came from somewhere along the plane, “Please remain calm” the airhostess said, she had horror in the tone of her voice, something’s gone wrong. I jumped up, people everywhere screaming, I tugged the window curtain cord. “OH MY GOD!” I shouted stunned by what I was seeing. Outside the ground was sandy and the sky was blue. “She’s bleeding!” Someone shouted. Airhostesses were fighting against the crowd to see the poor girl, I suddenly caught a glimpse of her, and blood trickled down her unconscious face, as she lay.
“Everyone go to the slides at the front of the plane.” An airhostess said trembling. I grabbed George by the arm and pulled him through the large panicking crowd, the crowd was to strong for George and couldn’t hold on to me. I tried to go back for him but the crowd was pushing me through the door, hundreds of people were there. I finally jumped into someone’s unoccupied seat and waited to George to come. The crowd finally came to an end but where was George! “George!” I screamed. Two airhostesses where forcing me off the plane, “But what about my boy?” I shouted at them desperate to see him.
“Sir, He is not on the plane, everyone has come off.”
“Well where is he!” I screamed.
“Sir, He is not on the plane,” she repeated
“I’ve had enough of you BS, just find my boy!”
I jumped down the slides and frantically looked for my boy, pushing and shoving through the crowds for him.
“George!” I screamed at the top of my voice.
Where had he gone? I continued to frantically search for him. I couldn’t find him. A tear trickled down my cheek, oh my boy must be so worried.
I went to one of the airhostesses and demanded them to search for him. They said they couldn’t do anything at the moment and that he will turn up. Suddenly I heard Georges voice shouting innocently “Daddy, where have you gone?” I ran towards the voice pushing people for me to get through, I even pushed an old lady with a walking stick. I saw his messy ginger hair in the crowd, and gave him the biggest hug ever.
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Old 01-01-2008, 06:42 PM   #2
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My little brothers 11, he can barely read that.

Not bad at all, for when you was 12.
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Old 01-22-2008, 06:07 PM   #3
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I love that you called him " your boy." I would never have thought lke that when I was 12. Very sweet.
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