Salaria

I couldn't even find the whole thing. This was just the beggining, but it shows how bad I was:

Chapter 1
The Newcomer

It was a hot summers day sometime in July .I was playing tennis with my two friends Mary and Lance. Lance is thirteen, Mary is twelve, and I am twelve. My name by the way is Joseph. Suddenly a moving truck came by. We saw it park just a couple of houses away. We ran over to see who was moving in. Maybe it’s a kid our age” I thought. But all we saw were a couple of mover men and an old man. He saw us coming and shouted" hello there” When we got there he greeted us happily, shook our hands and asked us our names


3rd grade was not kind to me nor my writing skills.

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scribblehood

Hehe, I particularly liked the line 'Suddenly a moving truck came by.' I love it how you put a moving truck, what else would a truck be doing?

chop

Aww how cute. I don't think I could write as good as that in my third grade. It's not that bad.

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Le Lila [x] ?

So innocent. I love it.
haha :]

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IrishLad

I particularly like the punctuation. It brings back memories, hehe.
Good stuff. Thanks for posting it.
Cheers

Kion

Always fun to look back at that adolescent writing. I looked at piece I wrote way back when the other day. "And then this happened, followed by this. Then that happened follow by that. Suddenly this happened, suddenly follow by that...etc" Utter crap for 15 pages, Plus the spelling and punctuation isn't as good as the re-write version seen here! I use to think it was so good. On the plus side it puts into perspective how much I've improved.

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Paige Turner

I think he meant a truck that you would use to move furniture, not a truck that is moving.
I have a question? Were you really twelve or was that just part of the story? Because if you were twelve and in the third grade, well...
Anyway, I don't think it's such bad writing. Any writing is a step in a good direction, even if you don't want to be an author.

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