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| File 13 Got something you were going to throw away, something that just didn't fit or work out the way you planned? Share it here. |
11-15-2007, 10:30 PM
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Wow... I was an awful writer.
Well, I still am, but I can't believe I actually wrote this piece of trash when I was 13. I dug this up on my hard drive and I almost wanted to gouge my eyes out. I think I wrote it for my girlfriend at the time. I don't think it's possible for me to continue writing as long as I know this garbage is haunting me. I've gotta get it into the public and bash it incessantly.
Funny thing is I remember I submitted it to "Poetry.com," and they sent me this really embellished letter about how they they wanted to publish it and send me to Washington D.C. for an awards ceremony and blah, blah, blah, providing I paid like a million dollars for it -- Yeah, these people were definitely full of shit:
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The True Love
Love was previously blind, not to be known.
Love was then aware, led to be shown.
Past accusations soon led to be
Fictitious fibs, which love wasn't meant to be.
Love had a face; the covering veil
Though looking deep inside the heart
Formed the tale.
The first wasn't love; only a lie
But this... could be love inside.
The new love, yes,
Indeed it is true.
For mutual feelings of love emanate from two.
For now deep inside both their hearts,
They found true love and will never be apart.
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Last edited by Mr Sci Fi : 11-15-2007 at 10:35 PM.
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11-16-2007, 12:36 AM
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You still are.
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11-16-2007, 07:45 AM
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I just said that. Comedy is all in the timing, and you totally blew it.
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11-16-2007, 12:13 PM
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hah. i really like that sheep picture.
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01-01-2008, 06:05 AM
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It's not that bad for a 13 year old. But for an adult, utter shit.
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01-11-2008, 09:46 PM
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Speaking as a 13 year old-- ow. Reading that poem hurt. Amazingly, some of my peers write worse than that.  |
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01-12-2008, 01:33 AM
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Well, yeah.
But how many people have the guts to put their juvenalia up in public view like that?
And the thing is, you poke around this site and you'll find worse. And not by thirteen year olds, either.
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01-12-2008, 04:42 PM
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Quote:
Originally Posted by lin
Well, yeah.
But how many people have the guts to put their juvenalia up in public view like that?
And the thing is, you poke around this site and you'll find worse. And not by thirteen year olds, either.
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Good point.
So true!  |
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01-18-2008, 11:05 AM
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I still write worse poetry than that.
Its not just the poetry thats bad my short storys suck as well.
Oh and my fiction. Not to mention my Sci-fi. Or my Crime - thriller stuff.
*continues to mumble about being shite for a while*
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01-19-2008, 09:03 PM
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I can't write poetry - end of story. So you've still got a one-up on me |
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02-22-2008, 10:56 PM
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For a thirteen year old, that was OK.
Anw, I can't do poetry for nutz...and neither can a lotta people...D:
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03-07-2008, 02:42 PM
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You are putting yourself down....
Many thirteen year olds can't even write like that...
Be a bit more proud of it.
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Of course, it's not your best work,
but you were young; you've grown and progressed.
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03-07-2008, 03:08 PM
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Lol, don't beat yourself over it man, thats what makes us better writers overall, looking at our past work and learning from it. For being only 13 I'd say that was actually not that bad, really. I remember (and still have) my very first copy of Alexander, I think I was 15 or 16, I'm 20 now, when I first wrote it. Anyway, I really didn't know what the heck I was doing, my grammer was ok, my ability to tell a story was good, just not disciplined enough, and my organization was bad. Bascially, the whole story wasn't going anywere, so I quite writing it for over a year. From 18-20 I really didn't do too much with it, just rewrote the intro about 3,000,000 times over. But that space did allow me to nail down the plot, form and build characters, and add several other "things". Now I finally have an intro and about 20 pages, its going well. I'm glad to say the book is largely plotted out and hope to share it soon! What really makes me sratch my head is how far I've come as far as being a writer, its pretty amazing. Now whenever I pull out the first draft of Alexander I just smile and shake my head (and pray to God no one reads it!).
Peace,
--AND
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03-07-2008, 04:54 PM
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I actually liked the first stanza
:p
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