my style of writing, like it or not? - Writers Forum

Jester27 · 11-15-2007, 06:11 PM

theres no place for the way i like to write so i guess ill put it here, they are just my random thoughts... some funny, thoughtful, and others depressing.. so if you want please comment or add, it really doesnt matter for the fact that this is my own form of therapy... enjoy (hopefully)...

drugs were the only productive thing i did in high school...

life is a joke, the trick is finding out the punchline before you die...

my dad may think im a failure, but no one in my life has failed me more than him...

if life is a box of choclates, i want to try all of them, except the cocanut ones...

T-shirt i will make- "f**k him for money, f**k me for the orgasms" funny right?

life is harder when you do it your way...

i think im gonna date a mentally ill girl, just to mix it up a bit...

do you think chickens say "cluck", because they dont have lips to say "f**k"...

if i had the gift of paitience, i wish i would just f**kin unwrap it already...

"too much of a good thing" makes no sence, if its too much it cant be good... iknow thats the point but its always bothered me...

imagine the effect one AK47 with unlimited ammo would have had in the revolutionary war...

lying is a skill that becomes more effective with less practice...

i want to play the memory game, with someone with alzheimers...

i wouldnt call myself a pessimist, more like an optimist chained by reality...

someday my thoughts will bring me riches, tonight they're just keeping me up...

i encourage my dog to eat his poo, my form of recycleing...

somedays i think about getting a tattoo, but then i think, what if im ever wanted by the police...

my dad is nuts, but my mom is peanut butter...

you can make fun of the omish hella tons on the internet...

areola would make a beatiful girls name, too bad its part of the breast...

well thats some of my writing, hope you enjoyed, hope i didnt offend anyone, pretty new here not familar with the tone of this forum yet..

thanks for reading...

Truth-Teller · 11-17-2007, 09:07 PM

Drugs are the only productive thing you did in high-school?

Learn some grammar; you are a joke.

Malone · 11-18-2007, 06:41 AM

Some of those are funny. If I were you, I'd take them and expand them into stories. Dating a mentally ill girl is always a cool topic. I know a Technology Teacher years ago in high school who was married to a retarded woman. I thought that was hilarious at the time, and the teacher a piece of shit. Too each his own, though. I guess there really is someone of there for everyone.
Good luck with your writing.

velo · 11-18-2007, 02:15 PM

some of these are funny, yes, but this isn't what I could call writing. These are phrases, ideas or concepts, but not writing. I can't therefore comment on your style of writing as I haven't seen it yet.

Flesh out some ideas, work with one or two of these phrases and build something around them.

Jester27 · 11-18-2007, 07:29 PM

thank you malone and velo for your kind words...

though i do disagree with you velo, that this is not a form of writing... though it may not be what your used too, i do it for the same reason that anyone else writes... it allows me to express myself...

but since it seems that my thoughts and style are not welcome here, i will take it elsewhere... i didnt think this forum was going to work out for me, though i do like what you guys have going here...

ohh and truth teller you are a pompous ass, thinking your something special when your just on a forum like everyone else... maybe if you werent so worried about the next snide comment to write someone you would take time and read the actual material...

drugs were the only productive thing i did in high school...

dumbass...

thank you and goodbye....

Malone · 11-18-2007, 07:41 PM

Haha. Truth teller actually gives good feedback, but he is an ass. I learn from the stuff he gives me about my work. I guess he didn't really say anything to learn from about you, though...except the grammar bit.

Truth-Teller · 11-18-2007, 07:58 PM

Get some backbone, Jester.

How are you going to react when you get rejected? Hang yourself with a noose?

Jester27 · 11-19-2007, 12:49 AM

hahaaha, well i already said goodbye but i couldnt help but to check in and see if i got a reaction...

i can take criticism, its just that ive been looking around these forums and truth be told Truth-Teller, you gennerally are mean spirited and, in what i have seen you hurt more than help around here... grammar is important, yes we all know this, but whats more important is the idea... and i think you got the idea... but that said you are not the reason why i have decided to leave this forum...

it is obvious that this forum is not the place for me, for christ sakes i had to post in File 13... though i dabble, i dont particuarly love conventional writing, and i believe that "one liners" can be just as thought provoking, as the main message of a 400 word story...

keep writing everyone, good luck

velo · 11-19-2007, 06:07 AM

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and i believe that "one liners" can be just as thought provoking, as the main message of a 400 word story..

Of course they can, no one said they couldn't be. My point was simply that these phrases have not been developed. They could be the premise for poems, stories, flash.....something, but as you presented them I did not feel that they were enough to comment on your 'writing style.'

And this is a great forum because people will call you out on just about anything. Truth-Teller is an ass but his name says it all. I don't think his style is overly productive but if you can sift through the chaff of his 'tude he does give decent advice on most occasions. He's correct in saying that if you can't take constructive criticism, this forum, and perhaps writing itself, isn't the thing for you. I don't care how well you write, there are always some who will hate your stuff.

DRuthie · 12-31-2007, 07:00 PM

Though this is not the writing that is usually seen on forums like these. They are funny and unique. I believe they would be perfect for t-shirts, bumper stickers, and refrigerator magnets.